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Eva Chang
If I can keep any pet of the world, I would pick…. Hello everyone I’m Joyce, Today I’m going to tell you guys If I can keep any pet of the world, which pet I would like to have. Frist, I will say that I actually don’t like to keep any pet, because I’m not a really good keeper. I’m bad at this, I used to have a rabbit and a turtle but they ended up dying at my home, and the reason why they died, it was because I forgot to feed them. But, If I can keep any pet of the world, I would pick a sloth. Let’s watch a very classic part of movie from Zootopia first, this sloth is very funny. Why do I want to choose a sloth as my pet? First of all, they eat everything! For example, fruits, vegetables, bugs, meats. Their actions are so slow, even some grasses are growing on their bodies and they can eat those grasses. Secondly, it takes a month to digest their food which in their body. If I forget to feed them, it will be okay, because I know that they won’t die. Finally, They poop in the same place, so I don’t have to train them to go to toilet. It’s really convenient, I don’t even have to clean their poop. This is the end of my story, thanks for your listening.

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If I can (could) keep any pet of the world, I would pick….

Hello everyone! I’m Joyce, .Today I’m going to tell you guys If I can keep any pet of the world, which pet  I would like to have. (1)

Frist First, I will(I'll) say that I actually don’t like to keep any pet, because I’m not a really good keeper. I’m bad at this it,: I used to have a rabbit and a turtle but they ended up dying at my home, and the reason why they died, it was because I forgot to feed them.
But, If I can keep any pet of in the world, I would pick a sloth.

Let’s watch a very classic part of the movie from Zootopia first, this sloth is very funny.(2)

Why do I want to choose a sloth as my pet?
First of all, they eat everything! For example, fruits, vegetables, bugs, meats. Their actions are so slow, that even some grasses are growing on their bodies and they can eat those grasses.
Secondly, it takes a month for them to digest their food which is in their body. If I forget to feed them, it will They'll (If you had used a singular at the beginning of the sentence then "it'll" would have been ok) be okay, because I know that they won’t die.
Finally, they poop in the same place, so I don’t have to train them to go to the toilet. It’s really convenient,: I don’t even have to clean their poop.


The parts in yellow are corrections, the parts in green are suggestions.

1) I'd switch the order so it flows better. "...tell you guys which pet I would like to have if I could keep any animal int he world"

This is the end of my story, thanks for your listening.

2) "...the movie first.(The sentence begs for a period there). The sloth in the movie is very funny"


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