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Could you correct my essay? Thanks! There are two opposite opinions on recycling about if requirement of recycling should be accompanied with legal regulation. Some people claimed strongly that government needs to intervene this issue and make legal restriction properly to increase recycling rate, but others argued that it is supposed to leave to individual’s conscience and responsibility of citizen, and not business of government, either. We all agree that recycling plays significant role to preserve sustained green environment and is also beneficial for companies and customers in terms of economical reason, which is decrease of manufacturing cost by recycling. First of all, let’s take a look about how much recycling is needed for environmental preservation. There are three different ways to deal with dump and trash we throw away every single days. We can burn with fire, bury under ground, or ocean. Burning them generates the gases which are detrimental to respiratory organs such as lungs and burring them under ground or ocean make a severe impact on animals and living creature which are living around. For example, turtles and gulls often recognize plastic material as their preys. Even it takes a few ten thousands of years to dissemble plastic under ground or ocean. Secondly, making products with recycled material can reduce the cost of manufacturing, which is advantageous for companies and household because companies can offer cheaper goods to customers. Therefore, because of a bounty of advantages of recycling, making it legal requirement is needed for public interests. For instance, government offers many kinds of subsidy, which is tax benefit, to residents whom they recycle more than average household, but gives punishment, environment charges, to them who didn’t obey the rule.

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There are two opposite opinions on recycling, including the idea of whether the requirements of recycling should be accompanied by legal regulation. Some individuals strongly claim that the government needs to intervene, and make legal restrictions to properly increase the recycling rate. However, others argued that it should be left to an individual’s conscience, and it is the responsibility of the citizen, not of the government. 

We can all agree that recycling plays a significant role of preserving a sustained green environment, and is also beneficial for companies and customers in terms of economical reasoning, in which recycling drastically decreases the manufacturing cost.


First, let’s take a look at how much recycling is needed for environmental preservation. There are three different ways to deal with garbage, as we throw away every single day. We can burn it with fire, bury it underground, or dump it within the ocean. Burning trash, however, generates gases that are detrimental to respiratory organs (such as the lungs), and burying them underground or in the ocean creates a severe (and often deadly) impact on animals and sea creatures. For example, turtles and gulls often recognize plastic material as their prey, which can be very harmful for them. It can even take a few hundred years to dissemble plastic that is underground or in the ocean.


Secondly, making products with recycled materials can reduce the cost of manufacturing, which is advantageous for both companies and households because this means that companies can offer cheaper goods to customers.


Therefore, due to the bounty of advantages related to recycling, I believe that making it a legal requirement to recycle is needed for public interest. For instance, the government could offer many kinds of subsidies, which could be a tax benefit to residents who recycle more than average household, but in turn, punishes and charges individuals who did not obey the rules.

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