What an embarrassing day (Please, could you check it out and help me to improve it?)

Very well written and amusing!

What an Embarrassing Day! (Would you please check it out and help me to improve it?)

One Saturday, I remember that I was on my way from Sahagun to the university in Sincelejo. By the way, I was accompanied by my classmate, Carmen Meza. I had arrived at Sincelejo coach station carrying some bags which were full of shirts. Both of us then got on a bus that was on the way to Corozal. I was just standing midway in the bus, looking for a seat in the back, though not being able to grab on to something because my hands were full with the bags. Then, all of a sudden, the bus jerked and started moving, I lost my balance, and somehow eventually ended up sitting on the lap of another passenger who was at the end of the aisle. I was, of course, totally embarrassed!

It was so bad even my dear classmate, Carmen, pretended not to know me at that moment and kindly looked the other way. However, shortly thereafter, and in the middle of a complete and awkward silence, we could hear a friend of ours giddy with laughter which, unfortunately, continued all the way to Corozal. Then, to top it all off, when we arrived at the pedestrian bridge in front of CECAR and I was trying to get off the bus, I slipped, and fell heavily onto the sidewalk with my bags and everything. I wasn’t hurt, but given my earlier mishap, I was, of course, once more, dying from embarrassment! I quickly stood up as if nothing had happened, gathered up my bags, and walked towards the bridge without looking back, but I could still clearly hear a few people laughing at me yet again.

Hi Will. Good job! Whatever changes that I’ve made were merely done to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears. I hope that this helps you. J.

*Thanks for sharing! Not once, but twice! And on the same day, and in front of the same people! Ouch! And yes, it still brings a smile to my face every time I think about it!)