Henry's Class

I was checking the last note I made and I found that I was misspelling words a lot. I'm sorry about that, it was because I was rushing when I wrote the notes so I didn't check it completely. Anyway, I'll start to explain about my book.

Sam went to Ron's brother's party. The day was very cold and snowy and that's why Sam wore pants and her jumper. However, when she arrived she saw that all the other girls were wearing dresses.  At first, Sam spoke to Ron using sign language and then Ron left her to speak to the other partygoers. Sam decided to go outside, because it was too hot indoors, and it was there that Sam found a man who was to be her lover...

Good work! You have excellent English and I like your use of retell words, such as "at first" and "then"!

Henry's class

Right now, I cheched my last notes and I found out miss spelling words a lots. I'm sorry about that because I was rushed when I wrote the notes so I didn't check it completlly. Anyway, I'll start to exprain about my book.
Sam went to Ron's brother's party. The day was very cold and snowy that's why Sam wore pants and her jumper however in the there is nobody who is putting on clothes like her, everyone waring dress. At first Sam has talked to Ron with sign language and then Ron went away from her to talk other people who is in this party. Then Sam went outside because of hot in there. In outside, Sam found one men and he was Sam's lover obviously...