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In modern, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. There are good things and bad things in this case.
In advantages, there are hard workers in country where there are younger adults more than older people. If much young people in a company, the company could be good efficiency company to work economics in a country. In this case, the country grows up to economics, workforce and business. Because we can say, if there are younger adults more than older people, a country could be rich country and people.
Moreover, they have time why is younger, they could be make new ideals to be good companies and countries. If they have new idea and it successes, it is effect to political, economics, business and management in a country.
Not only advantages but also there are disadvantages.
In disadvantage, there are few leaders in a country if there are younger adults more than older people in the country. If there are few leaders, it spends much time that to teach how to do business and management when work economics themselves. Because they have to make new business, management and somethings.
Overall, these are the advantages and disadvantages what I said.
When those compare, the advantage outweighs the disadvantages.
These can follow and support the disadvantages in the advantage to create a good country. That’s why I think It is better that there are number of younger more than number of older people in some countries.
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In modern times, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. There are good things and bad things in this case. about this.In as for advantages, there are harder workers in country where there are more younger adults more than older people. If there are much young people in a company, the company could be good efficiency efficient company to work economics in a country. In this case, the country grows up to economics, helping the country to grow its financials, workforce and business. Because we can say if there are more younger adults more than older people, a country could be a rich country and people.
Moreover, they have more time why is being younger, so they could be bring new ideals to be create good companies and prosperous countries. If they have a new idea and it successes, succeeds it is effects the to political, politics economics, business and management in a country.
There are not only advantages but also there are disadvantages.
In disadvantage, there are few seasoned leaders in a country if there are mostly younger adults more than older people in the country. If there are few leaders, it spends much time is spent that to teaching and training people how to do business and management instead of working on their own. when work economics themselves. Because they have to make When they need to be creating new business, management and somethings.so forth.
Overall, these are the main advantages and disadvantages as I see it. what I said.
When those compare, In compatison, the advantage outweighs the disadvantages.
These can follow and support the disadvantages in the advantage to create a good country. That’s why I think It is better that there are a good number of younger more than number of older people in some countries.
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In modern times, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. There are good things and bad things about this situation.One advantage is that there are hard workers in a country where there are younger adults more than older people. If there are many young people in a company, the company could be very efficient and improve the economy of the country. In this case, the country grows up to economics, workforce and business. Because we can say, if there are more younger adults than older people, the country and its population could become richer. Moreover, while they are younger, they could generate new ideas to improve their companies and countries. If they have new ideas that are successful, it could affect the politics, economics, business and management in a country.
There are disadvantages as well as advantages. For example, there are few leaders in a country if there are more younger adults than older people in the country. If there are few leaders, it takes more time to teach how to do business and management when work economics themselves. Because they have to make new business, management and somethings.
Overall, comparing these advantages and disadvantages that I described, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
These advantages can overcome the disadvantages to create a good country. That’s why I think it is better that there are more younger people than older people in some countries.
よくできました。色々な文法の問題がありますのに、テーマと大切な思想がはっきり言われると思います。一度だけ作家の言いたい意味が分かりにくいです。この場合に文をオレンジにしました。
小さいことですが、特にその「moreover」とか「 That’s why I think It is better that 」は上手に使いましたよ。本当に感心しました。直しについての質問があると聞いてください。しかし僕は日本語で説明できるか分からなくてすみません。
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