Some words and sentences might seem odd, pls help me make it well-written, thanks.
I am drawn to studying the effects that new media and Internet have on society and individuals, especially the psychological aspects behind it. When I read articles online about cyberbullying, I would always wonder the reasons that may have worsened the situation. Thereupon, I formed a group to research on this topic with both Chinese and foreign sources. The course Communication Research Method has helped me immensely in terms of learning the use of SPSS to process data and studying qualitative and quantitative research methods, in where I got a 92. To me, the process of audience research and data analysis gives me a sense of achievement because number and data are valid to prove my research topic. In comparison to other countries and regions, I have noticed the lack of analytical methods for verifying data in domestic research material, which is one of the reasons I gave up on the graduate programme in China, and instead to reach out to the external opportunities.
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Some words and sentences might seem odd, pls help me make it well-written, thanks.
I am drawn to studying the effects that new media and the Internet have on society and individuals, especially the psychological aspects behind them. When I would read articles online about cyber-bullying, I would always wondered about the reasons that may have worsened the situation. Therefore, I formed a group to research on this topic with both Chinese and foreign sources. The course, Communication Research Method, has helped me immensely in terms of learning the use of SPSS to process data and studying qualitative and quantitative research methods in which I received a 92. To me, the process of audience research and data analysis gives me a sense of achievement because numbers and data are valid to prove my research topic. In comparison to other countries and regions, I have noticed a lack of analytical methods for verifying data in domestic research material, which is one of the reasons that I gave up on the graduate programme in China and instead, to reach out to further opportunities.programme - British English program - American English
Some changes that I made were stylistic. Your writing is generally of high quality. If you have any questions concerning my suggestions, please just ask. :-)
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