A moment of Peace
To sit in a half-lit room near a sleeping cat, listening to the vague sounds of a warm city night, keeping mind open to everything that worries you. Isn't that happiness?
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A Moment of Peace
To be able to sit in a half lit room near a sleeping cat; to be able to listen1. I understand what you are trying to say here. The indistinctive and fuzzy sounds in a city. It is better to you vagary to mean unpredictability. By adding the word distant, you conjure a better image to the reader's mind. Because it is far away, the reader an imagine the fuzziness.
You expresses your thoughts most beautifully. I can feel as though I was there with you!
Since your English is very good and I shall rewrite your piece in my style for you to compare :)
Sitting in a dimlit room near a sleeping cat, I hear its purr. With a glass of wine in hand, I listen to the vagary sounds of a distant city embraced in the warmth of the night. I opened my mind and able to reflect all that is worrisome. Such are but the simple luxuries of life that not many know they can afford... True?
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