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Good morning,everyone!I'm very pleasure be here to introduce this product.firtly,I want to ask you a question:if there is lound snoring when you are sleeping well.how do u feel?
Anyway,I personally will feel very uncomfortable,if the person is lying by my side,maybe,I will wake her up.i did this to my mom
Actually,this condition often happens to couples and roommates
Ok,don't worry!this product can help u get rid of this noise,it's called Nora,a kind of snore-creasing equipment.it's a overseas crowdfunding item and consists of three parts,respectively:pebbles wireless microphone,a pillow mat,a mini pump box.it's worth mentioning is that Nora's pillow mat is suitable to any pillow,whatever it is soft or hard.meanwhile,it's also not affected by any sleeping posture,whether you are used to sleeping back or like pillow at the edge.Nora can work well!by the way,compared to those invasive snore creasing equipment,Nora is non-invasive,so it absolutely will not affect the user's health.this is another advantage of Nora!
Next,I will introduce the working principal of Nora,Firstly,the reason why we snore is the muscles loose in our throat make the respiratory tract narrowed ,so the flow of air through the small airway will cause vibration when we sleep.This is snore that we heard.
Nora is designed for this,the pebbles wireless microphone will send signals to make the pump box inflate or deflate the pillow mat when it detects user's snore,then adjust user's head silently and softly!
(Please help me correct mistakes in this essay,thank u so so much!!!!!!this is my speech draft)
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Please help me correct mistakes
Good morning,everyone!I'm very pleasure pleased to be here to introduce this product. firtly, Firstly, I want to ask you a question:if there is lound snoring when you are sleeping well...how do u you feel? Do not use u instead of you.Anyway, I personally will feel very uncomfortable,if the person is lying by my side next to me, maybe,I will wake her up.i did this to my mom.
Actually,this condition often happens to couples and roommates.
Ok,don't worry!this product can help u you get rid of this noise,it's called Nora,a kind of snore-creasing equipment.it's an overseas crowdfunding item and consists of three parts,respectively:pebbles wireless microphone,a pillow mat, and a mini pump box.it's worth mentioning is that Nora's pillow mat is suitable to for any pillow,whatever whether it is soft or hard.meanwhile,it's also not affected by any sleeping posture,whether you are used to sleeping on your back or like having the pillow at the edge (edge of what? the bed?).Nora can work well!by the way,compared to those invasive snore creasing equipment, Nora is non-invasive,so it absolutely will not affect the user's health.this is another advantage of Nora!
Next,I will introduce the working principal of Nora,Firstly,the reason why we snore is that when we sleep make the muscles loosen in our throat making the respiratory tract narrowed narrower ,so the flow of air through the small airway will cause vibrations when we sleep.This is snore the snoring that we heard hear.
Nora is designed for this,the pebbles wireless microphone will send signals to make the pump box inflate or deflate the pillow mat when it detects the user's snore snoring,then adjust the user's head silently and softly!
(Please help me correct mistakes in this essay,thank u so so much!!!!!!this is my speech draft)
This is excellent writing well done, good luck with the speech, Charlotte
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it's a bit too technical to correct...
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