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A new factory is going to be built in your hometown
With modern society and people’s demand, more and more factories and companies grows up in a lots countries. My hometown is not except an exception, a new project is going to be perform on built in my hometown land. I believe that It will be great and good chọice to bring opportunity for themselves and many others.Firstly, It is big chance to find out employment. Now, people in my hometown are main farmer and do agriculture. And the rest of people is unemployment are unemployed. So, this project will bring them a lot of advantages in getting off poverty situation out of poverty. I hope that everyone have a complete life and they will be not nervous about everything their arounding whole life.
Development and connection to community is the second factor so that I want to mention. It is very great when in here, more and more incorporations were businesses are going to be built. They will change completely this place, make it becoming a more modern, convernient and smart city.
Thank to giving advanced technical to applying production good, improve human’s creative. It is a useful connecting tool. (I'm not sure what this sentence means. Maybe: Using new technology can increase human creativity. )
Moreover, the poor village will be instead of the luxury city. On street, I can be see lots of restaurants, cinemas, and so on which help people approach with industry embrace the industrial changes. They will be broaden become more broad-minded and proud of our land.
Most important, to make the employee commute more convenient, the local roads will have to be rebuilt and broadened, resulting in improved public transportation. The town's residents can take a public bus to go shopping or go to work. As a result, air pollution and fuel consumption might be reduced.
Generally, It always has two sides: advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, Tthe benefits will have more trend popularity and eaffect everyone. Therefore, I agree with the plan to build a factory near my community. It is a bright spot for my hometown.
Excellent final paragraph! You use a lot of advanced grammar, which is great. I made a few changes to make it sound more natural to native speakers.
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