火车站的小偷
2017年2月8号 日记
火车站的小偷
昨天晚上我下班以后，走了火车站。到了火车站以后， 从我的包我拿我的手机看了一本手机里的书，等火车。一个火车到了但是它不是我回家的火车。这个火车停了以后，几个年轻的男人下车，他们过去了我 。我看到她们但是我不觉得他们是坏人。过了一会儿一个我以前看到了年轻的男人回来。他过去了我后面 。我觉得很奇怪。为什么他回火车站？为什么他走比我很近？单是我在心里想他可能只跟我一样等火车。过了一会儿他又向我走了。我一边看我的手机里的书一边偷偷看了他。他比我很近的时候突然试被我手机抓着！我拉手机向我身体，单他已经抓着。因为我拉手机向我身体，他不可以拿走了。所以我的手机撞在地上。小偷像风跑过了。我从地上拿我的手机看一看。手机很好啊！Whew, that was a close call. 这个故事是真的。
Train Station Thief
Last night after I got off work I walked to the train station. When I got there, I took out my cell phone to read a book and wait for the train. A train arrived, but it wasn’t my train. When the train stopped a few young men got off the train and walked past me. I saw them but didn’t think they were bad people. After a while one of the young men I’d seen earlier came back. I thought this was strange. Why would he come back to the train station? Why was he walking so close to me? I thought to myself, maybe he’s just waiting for the train like me. After a while he walked back towards me. I kept reading my book but also kept sneaking looks at him. When he got close to me he suddenly tried to grab my cell phone. I pulled it back close to my body but he’d already grabbed it. Because I pulled it back he couldn’t get a good hold on it and it crashed to the ground. The thief took off running like the wind. I picked up my phone and looked at it. It was just fine. Whew, that was a close call. This is a true story.
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火车站的小偷
2017年2月8号 日记火车站的小偷
昨天晚上我下班以后，走去了火车站。到了火车站以后， 从我的包我拿我的手机看了一本手机里的书我从包里拿出手机，一边看电子书，一边等火车。一个辆火车到了，但是它不是我回家的火车。这个这辆火车停了以后，几个年轻的男人下（了）车，他们过去了我从我身边走过 ，我看到着她他们但是我不觉得他们是坏人。过了一会儿，一个我以前刚刚看到了见过的年轻的男人走了回来，他过去了我后面 。我觉得很奇怪，为什么他回火车站？为什么他走比我很近他走得离我这么近？单是（Did u want to write“但是”？），我在心里想他可能只（是）跟我一样（在）等火车。过了一会儿他又向我走（回来）了。我一边看我的手机里的书电子书一边偷偷看了着他。他比离我很近的时候突然尝试被我手机抓着抓我的手机！我拉手机向我身体我把手机向我身边拉回来，单但是他已经抓着住了。因为我拉手机向我身体我把手机向我身边拉回来，他不可以拿走了（I thought "他拿不稳手机" is what u want to say.），所以我的手机撞被摔在地上，小偷像风（一样）跑过掉了。我从地上拿（起）我的手机看一看，手机很好完好啊！Whew, that was a close call. （You can say, "呼~真是险呐！"）这个故事是真的。
It's a good diary, I almost placed myself in it! And the things that u need to focus, are, ①The difference between "以前" & “刚刚”, ②The measure word of the train is "辆", ③The “把” construction. Keep going!! Any further questions, you can talk to me. :-)
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火车站的小偷
2017年2月8号 日记火车站的小偷
昨天晚上我下班以后，走进了火车站。到了火车站以后， 从我的包我拿我的手机看了一本手机里的书(从包里拿出手机看了一本电子书)，等火车。一个辆火车到了但是它不是我回家的火车。这个辆火车停了以后，几个年轻的男人下车，他们过去经过了我 。我看到她们但是我不觉得他们是坏人。过了一会儿一个我以前刚才看到了的年轻的男人走回来。他过去走到我后面 。我觉得很奇怪。为什么他要回到火车站？为什么他走比得离我很近？但是我在心里想他可能只是跟我一样等火车。过了一会儿他又向我走了来。我一边看我的手机里的书一边偷偷看了他。他比离我很近的时候突然试着抓我的手机！我拉手机向我身体(我把手机拉向身体)，但他已经抓着。因为我拉手机向我身体(因为我把手机拉向身体)，他不可以拿走了。所以我的手机撞掉在地上。小偷像风一样跑过了。我从地上拿捡起我的手机看一看。手机很完好啊！Whew, that was a close call. 这个故事是真的。
Train Station Thief
Last night after I got off work I walked to the train station. When I got there, I took out my cell phone to read a book and wait for the train. A train arrived, but it wasn’t my train. When the train stopped a few young men got off the train and walked past me. I saw them but didn’t think they were bad people. After a while one of the young men I’d seen earlier came back. I thought this was strange. Why would he come back to the train station? Why was he walking so close to me? I thought to myself, maybe he’s just waiting for the train like me. After a while he walked back towards me. I kept reading my book but also kept sneaking looks at him. When he got close to me he suddenly tried to grab my cell phone. I pulled it back close to my body but he’d already grabbed it. Because I pulled it back he couldn’t get a good hold on it and it crashed to the ground. The thief took off running like the wind. I picked up my phone and looked at it. It was just fine. Whew, that was a close call. This is a true story.
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火车站的小偷
2017年2月8号 日记火车站的小偷
昨天晚上我下班后。到了火车站， 从我的包里拿出手机看一本手机里的书，等火车。一辆火车到了但是它不通向我回家的路，这辆火车停了以后，几个年轻的男人下车，他们从我身边走了过去，我看着他们但是我不觉得他们是坏人。过了一会儿一个我刚看到的年轻男人回来。他走到我后面。我觉得很奇怪。为什么他回火车站？为什么他走比我很近？单纯认为他可能和我一样在等火车。过了一会儿他又向我走了过来，我一边看我的手机里的书一边偷偷看他。他离我很近的时候突然抓住我的手机！我把手机紧紧攥住，但他已经抓着。因为我紧紧拿着手机，他没办法拿走。手机掉到了地上，小偷像风一样跑了，我从地上拿我的手机一看。手机很好啊！Whew, that was a close call. 这个故事是真的。
Train Station Thief
Last night after I got off work I walked to the train station. When I got there, I took out my cell phone to read a book and wait for the train. A train arrived, but it wasn’t my train. When the train stopped a few young men got off the train and walked past me. I saw them but didn’t think they were bad people. After a while one of the young men I’d seen earlier came back. I thought this was strange. Why would he come back to the train station? Why was he walking so close to me? I thought to myself, maybe he’s just waiting for the train like me. After a while he walked back towards me. I kept reading my book but also kept sneaking looks at him. When he got close to me he suddenly tried to grab my cell phone. I pulled it back close to my body but he’d already grabbed it. Because I pulled it back he couldn’t get a good hold on it and it crashed to the ground. The thief took off running like the wind. I picked up my phone and looked at it. It was just fine. Whew, that was a close call. This is a true story.
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