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Could someone take a look at my short text about Climate Change? "Climate Change" is real. How is possible that some people deny its existence? A few days ago I came across a magazine (by chance) that I had forgotten  among other books. I read an article about "Climate Change". I was surprised to read that within the five countries more affected  is Chile included (or: Chile is one of them). There are a lot of evidences about the changing climate around the World. Greenland in the past April had the highest temperature ever registered. In The Artic ice has declined significantly over the past three or four decades.  China suffered the past year one of coldest winters in the last 50 years. In our country, Chile, over the past three or four decades we have saw how the Atacama's desert has gone gaining ground and how in the South of Chile, where are some of the most rainy places in the planet, the rains have been gradually decreasing. Maybe, one of the most important feature of the change climate are its extreme events. We have faced sometimes long periods of drought, othertimes torrential rains.  We have also had extreme temperatures, like this Spring that we had the warmest day in our Spring's history with a temperature up to 38 Celsius degree. The most likely causes of this change lies in human actions. So, I wonder again, how is possible to deny something that show us many evidence? I only have one answer:  "economics interests". (I'm sure that some economics interests doesn't get along with "the nature" (or The Earth)).

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Hi Mauricio, This is just how I would write the same paragraph. Great work ((-:    -un saludo

Climate change is real. How can it be possible for some people to deny its existence. A few days ago I came across a magazine by chance that had been forgotten amongst some books. I read in it an article about climate change. I was surprised to read that Chile is amongst one of the five countries most affected by climate change. There is a lot of evidence about the changing climate around the world. Greenland had its highest temperature ever recorded during the past April. In the Arctic the ice cap has shrunk significantly over the last three or four decades. China in the past year has suffered one of its coldest winters in fifty years. In our country Chile, over the past three or four decades it can be seen how the Atacama desert has been gaining ground and how in the south of Chile, where rainfall levels are amongst the highest on the planet, there has been a gradual decrease in these rainfall levels. Perhaps the most important feature of climate change are extreme events. We have faced at times, long periods of drought, at other times torrential rains. We have also had extreme temperatures, for example this spring we had the highest ever recorded spring temperature of 38 degrees Celsius. The most likely cause of this change lies in human actions. So again I wonder, how can it be possible to deny climate change when there is so much evidence to prove its existence? I have only one answer: “economic interests” (I am convinced that certain “economic interests” don't care about respecting nature or with respecting the earth). 

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Could someone take a look at my short text about Climate Change?

"Climate Change" is real. How is it possible that some people deny its existence? A few days ago I came across a magazine (by chance) that I had forgotten  among some other books. I read an article about "Climate Change". I was surprised to read that within the five countries mentioned more affected  is Chile was affected the most included (or: Chile is one of them). There areis a lot of evidences about the changing climate around the World.
This past April, Greenland in the past April had the highest temperature ever registered.
The Ice in The Arctic has declined significantly over the past three or four decades.  China suffered in the past year one of coldest winters in the last 50 years.
In our country, Chile, over the past three or four decades we have saw how the Atacama's desert [or the Atacaman Desert] has started gone gaining ground and how in the South of Chile, where are some of the most rainy places in the planet are, the rains [or rainfall] havehas been gradually decreasing. Maybe, one of the most important features of the change climate are its extreme events. For example We have faced sometimes long periods of drought and other times torrential rains.  We have also had extreme temperatures, like this Spring that we had the warmest day in our Spring's history with a temperature up to 38 Celsius degree  38 Degrees Celsius.
The most likely causes of this change lies in human actions. So, I wonder again, how is possible to deny something that has so much show us many evidence? I only have one answer:  "economics interests". (I'm sure that some economics interests doesn't get along with "the nature" (or The Earth)).

This was really good! You only had simple mistakes you write better than some of my American friends here. Way to go! Any questions, just message me!
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Thank you for the link. We are suffering the consequences of the "warming global".
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This puts it into some perspective: https://xkcd.com/1732/

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