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Imagine Imagine a cold afternoon of December in Helsinki, -8° outside. It’s just 4 pm but the sun is already disappeared to illuminate other cities far away. The darkness is wrapping all around you, but it is no so bad. You are in the famous Market Square and the Christmas lights warm up the atmosphere. In front of you the Baltic Sea and a little further away a coloured Ferris wheel and the hot vapour that goes up from an outdoor pool of a sauna establishment. Immediately a thought crosses your mind ‘Why not? Let’s make something in the Finnish way’. After a while you are running toward that pool, wearing just your bathing suit. Oh my God it is really cold! What was I thinking!? As soon as you jump into it, the hot water relaxes you and you feel good. From time to time you need to submerge completely in the water because the cold is freezing your head. Even the stepladder is covered by ice stalactites and you don’t know how you could get out from the pool. Suddenly a bang and the dark sky is lighted up and coloured by circle shapes: the fireworks! You cannot believe it. It is really mad and amazing! You, imagine all this…I don’t need because I lived it! Thanks Finland!

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Imagine a cold December afternoon of December in Helsinki, -8° outside.
It’s just 4 pm, but the sun is has already disappeared to illuminate other cities far away.
The darkness is wrapping itself all around you, but it is no so bad. You are in the famous Market Square and the Christmas lights warm up the atmosphere.
In front of you is the Baltic Sea, and a little further away, there is a coloured Ferris wheel and the hot vapour that goes up evaporates from an outdoor pool of a sauna establishment.
Immediately, a thought crosses your mind: "Why not? Let’s make something in the Finnish way."
After awhile, you are running toward that pool, wearing just your bathing suit. "Oh my God it is really cold! What was I thinking!?" you ponder.
As soon as you jump into it, the hot water relaxes you and you feel good. From time to time, you need to submerge completely in the water because the cold is freezing your head. Even the stepladder is covered by ice stalactites, and you don’t know how you could get out from the pool.
Suddenly, a bang sounds, and the dark sky is lighted lit up and coloured by circle shapes: the fireworks! You cannot believe it! It is really mad and amazing!
You imagine all this, but I don’t need because I lived it! Thanks Finland!


Carla, outstandingly written! Just remember your commas after introductory clauses. Your English is incredibly good!

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