About My Hometown

I live in a small city in the south of China. In the past, my hometown was very small and the people there lived in a poor life. They lived in old houses and few visitors came here. Now, things have changed.The living conditions are much better and many people live in more bigger houses and have their own cars. Of course, I hope my hometown will be even more beautiful in the future.
I love my hometown and my life. As a famous quote said quoted famously : East, West, home is the best!
Now, I would like to learn English. It will helps me to make many friends who are from different countries and to  learn more about the world.

About My Hometown

I live in a small city in the south of China. In the past, my hometown was very small and people there lived a poor life. They lived in old houses and few visitors came here. Now, however, things have changed! The living conditions are much better. Many people live in much bigger houses and even have their own cars. Of course, I hope that my hometown will be more beautiful in the future.
I love my hometown and my life. To paraphrase a famous quote: "East, West, home is the best!"
Now, I would like to learn English. It will help me make many friends who are from different countries and learn more about the world.

Hi Jie! A very good job! As to the English, watch your punctuation, or more correctly, the spacing as it comes after a period and a comma. Probably a typo, but the first word (now) in a sentence is always capitalized. Which leads us to proofreading--you should do so before posting! I also made a few minor additions/changes to make your sentences sound better to my native ears. Finally, the picture of your city looks nice, so why didn't you tell us the name of it in your essay? I hope this helps you. J. (*_^)