Priorities
Everybody has different priorities. Somebody suppose that family is the most important thing in our life. Somebody cares about career only. So many men, so many minds.
What about me, I think that relatives are the closest and most important people in our lives. So family is my first priority. Without my family I can't imagine my life. It is my support and protection.
My second priority is self-development and intellectual growth. I believe that self-development should be going on during the whole life. I love smart and many-sided people, I love talking with them. And I want to be one of them. So I try to read more high-quality literature, watch more interesting films, meet new clever people. Self-development is really important to me.
My next priority is health. As the famous saying goes, "Health is wealth". If a person has a poor health, he doesn't need money, he can't engaged in career. He doesn't want anything at all. So, if we want to live long and happy life, we should care about our health.
My another priority is wealth. Wealth give you an opportunity to do what you love. Also wealth guarantee a comfort life. I like comfort.
And the last my priority is career growth. I am a designer and create different things, so my job doesn't mean increase. But I understand that for other people career growth is kind of indicator which show them that they cope with their work. So it is also important.
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Priorities
Everybody has different priorities. One supposes that family is the most important thing in our life; another cares about career only. So many men, so many minds.What about me; I think that relatives are the closest and most important people in our lives. So family is my first priority. Without my family I can't imagine my life. It is my support and protection.
My second priority is self-development and intellectual growth. I believe that self-development should be going on during one's whole life. I love smart and many-sided people, I love talking with them. And I want to be one of them. So I try to read more high-quality literature, watch more interesting films, meet new clever people. Self-development is really important to me.
My next priority is health. As the famous saying goes, "Health is wealth". If a person has poor health, he doesn't need money, he can't engage in a career. He doesn't want anything at all. So, if we want to live a long and happy life, we should care about our health.
Another of my priorities is wealth [or: A further priority is wealth]. Wealth gives you an opportunity to do what you love. Also wealth guarantees a comfortable life. I like comfort.
And the last of my priorities is career-growth. I am a designer and create different things, so my job doesn't mean increase [reword to clarify the meaning]. But I understand that for other people career growth is a kind of indicator which shows them that they cope with their work. So it is also important.
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