Please, help to correct. TOEFL Independent Essay Part 1
In Russia, nowadays, research work is in the process in various fields of the human activity. In my opinion, research in agricultural sphere in the most demand among local businessmen and farmers than any other kind of field. I think this way for two main reasons, which I will explore further on.
To begin with, Russia possesses the biggest territory in the world, including fertile farmlands with many rivers and lakes for irrigation purposes, evergreen vast forests, which are needed to be developed and maintained in a good state. It is widely known that previously agricultural segment used to have first priority in economy of the USSR, however after the downfall of the great empire in the 1990s more than half of active farmlands were in decline leaving no one in charge of the harvest, seeding functions. Therefore, only Krasnodarsky Region was able to keep the land in sustainable state and give profits to local authorities, which indicates about highly fertile quality of these lands and reasonability of state executive officers in comparison to those state managers who sold enormous territories to be used for private construction or who left farmlands without financial support. For instance, the village that I am originally from can be the proper example of this. The field that is close to my parents’ house once was in the property of state agricultural company and every summer they used different crop to be planted on the field: corn, wheat, pea and many others. Unfortunately, over the time the field became abandoned and there was name game for us, children, like hiding, picking that or another delicious plant. Therefore, many of the farmlands in our motherland are useless and gave no profit to the government.
(the second part will be posted tomorrow because I breached the limit for a day)
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Please, help to correct. TOEFL Independent Essay Part 1
In Russia, nowadays the process of research work is in the process is found in various fields of human activity. In my opinion, research in the agricultural sphere is the most demanding among local businessmen and farmers than any other kind of fields. I think this way for two main reasons, that will be explored further on.To begin with, Russia possesses the biggest territory in the world, including fertile farmlands with many rivers and lakes for irrigation purposes; evergreen vast forests, which are needed to be developed and maintained in a good state. It is widely known that previously agricultural segments used to have first priority in economy of the USSR, however, after the downfall of the great empire in the 1990s more than half of these active farmlands were in decline because no one was left to care for the harvest. leaving no one in charge of the harvest, seeding functions. Therefore, only the Krasnodarsky Region was able to keep the land in a sustainable state condition and give profits to local authorities, which indicated that these lands where highly fertile; this being because the state executives officers did the opposite to those of other state managers, who sold enormous territories to private construction, leaving farmlands without financial support. about highly fertile quality of these lands and reasonability of state executive officers in comparison to those state managers who sold enormous territories to be used for private construction or who left farmlands without financial support. For instance, the village in which I was born that I am originally from can be a proper example of this. The field that is used to be close to my parents’ house once, was in the now the property of the states' agricultural company and , who then harvested every summer they used different crops such as : corn, wheat, pea and many others. Unfortunately, over the years, the field was abandoned and was used by name game for us, children, as a palace to play games and pick delicious plants growing there.
Therefore, because of these reasons many of the lands that were previously used in our motherland for farming are now useless and give no profit to the government.
(the second part will be posted tomorrow because I breached the limit for a day)
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