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Please, help to correct. TOEFL Integrated essay The text and the lecture are about the missing colonists of Roanoke island that could move on the other islands nearby or to inland area. The author of the reading passage believes that colonist possibly went to the neighboring island of Croatan. The lecturer casts doubt on this theory presented in the article and thinks that they actually moved on the main land. First of all, the author claims that those people moved to a different island named as Croatan. He states as proof the proximity of the island to Roanoke. However, this point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that Croatan Island was searched thoroughly in-depth and no sign or trace of the colonists was found there. Moreover, searching mission was undertaken several times with no evidence of the missing colonists. Secondly, the author states that special carvings “Cro” and “Croatan” were left by the colonists on the trees and a fence post which allows to suggest that people moved to the neighboring island of Croatan. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He notes that on the continent there are many names can be found that somehow correlates or matches the word “Croatan”. Finally, the professor mentions the unexpected discovery of unusual tribe on Lamber river that happened 200 years after the colonists were missed. He states that the newly found people of that tribe called themselves Croatan, spoke English and local languages, and had such fair features as blond hair and blue eyes unlike other tribes on the continent. Therefore, the lecturer puts forth the idea that this is the evidence that Roanoke missing colonists moved inland area and intermixed with local tribes.

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Please, help to correct. TOEFL Integrated essay
The text and the lecture are about the missing colonists of Roanoke island that WHO ARE SUPPOSED TO HAVE MOVED EITHER ON OTHER CLOSE ISLANDS OR OTHERWISE to THE inland area. The author of the reading passage STRONGLY believes that THE colonists possibly went to the neighboring island of Croatan. The lecturer , ON HIS HAND, casts doubt on this theory presented in the article and thinks that they actually RATHER moved TO the main land.
First of all, the author claims that those people moved to a different island named as Croatan. He states THAT AN EVIDENCE OF IT IS UNDOUBTEDLY the proximity of the island to ROANOKE ITSELF. However, this point is challenged by the lecturer. He says, IN POINT OF FACT, that THE Croatan Island HAD ALREADY BEEN INVESTIGATED -EXCAVATED- thoroughly in-depth and no sign or trace of the colonists HAD EVER BEEN found there.
Moreover, searching mission was undertaken several times with no evidence of the missing colonists.

Secondly, the author states that special carvings, THAT IS “Cro” and “Croatan” , were left by the SUPPOSED colonists on the trees and a fence post, which allows to suggest that people HAD, IN ACTUALLY FACT, moved to the neighboring island of Croatan. DESPITE ALL THIS, The lecturer rebuts this argument; he notes that INSTEAD IT SHOULD BE AFFIRMED QUITE THE OPPOSITE, BECAUSE, IN THE LIGHT OF AN ARCHEOLOGICAL THEORY, IT HAPPENED THAT In the continent LOTS OF PROPER NAMES HAD BEEN FOUND which SOMEHOW CORRELATED TO, IF NOT EVEN ALMOST PERFECTLY MATCHING ,the word “Croatan”.

Finally, the professor mentions the unexpected discovery of unusual AN AWKWARD tribe on THE Lamber river, WHO HAD APPEARED 200 years after the colonists were missed. He states that THIS "NEWLY BORN" PEOPLE of that tribe called themselves Croatan, spoke English and local languages, and had such fair features as blond hair and blue eyes (WHICH MADE THEM LOOK unlike other tribes ACTUALLY PRESENT on the continent!) Therefore, the lecturer puts forth the idea that this MAY BE the evidence that THE Roanoke missing colonists HAD STRAIGHTFORWARDLY moved TOWARDS THE inland area and THEN intermixed with THE NATIVE local tribes.

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