I want, I can and I'll get it! Hi, my name`s Carol and I`m Brazilian. I like many things such as: photography, art, colored pencils (in fact, all about stationery), dogs, sweets, make friends, stay wi

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I want, I can and I'll get it! Hi, my name`s Carol and I`m Brazilian. I like many things such as: photography, art, colored pencils (in fact, all about stationery), dogs, sweets, make friends, stay with my family and travel a lot! I live in a big country so I always traveled around Brazil, but a few years out here, I started to travel to the others countries like: Argentina, Uruguay, Italy, Portugal, England, United States, France etc. and the last country was South Korea. Then, because of this travels and my desire to make foreign friends, I realized I needed to study English to become fluent. When I talk with somebody in English, sometimes I forget a word, sometimes my pronunciation is wrong or I speak words that are in the books that I learn English but that aren`t longer used by the native people. Thus, for me to achieve my goal of fluency, I'm going in English classes five days a week with Callan Method, watching English channels on TV and Netflix with English legends, I subscribed on some YouTube channels the teach English and now I`m also in italk. I hope to achieve my goal soon and I am striving hard for it!

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{The entry is too long so I ran out of editing characters}

Part 1: Corrections

I Want It, I Can Do It and I'll Get It! {Because you can't say "I can it", you need to write out all the verb phrases with "it". You can't "shortcut" the verbs and just say "it" once.}

Hi, my name's Carol and I'm Brazilian. I like many things such as: photography, art, colored pencils (in fact, all about everything to do with stationery), dogs, sweets, making friends, stay spending time with my family and traveling a lot!

I live in a big country so I have always traveled around Brazil, but a few years out hereago, I started to travel to the others countries like: Argentina, Uruguay, Italy, Portugal, England, United States, France, etc. and the last country (I visited) was South Korea.

Then, Because of these travels and my desire to make foreign* friends, I realized I needed to study English to become fluent. When I talk with somebody in English, sometimes I sometimes** forget a word, sometimes my pronunciation is wrong or I speak say words that are {better: appear} in the books that I use to learn English but that aren`t no longer used by the native people speakers.

*It sounds better to say "make friends from other countries".

**It sounds more natural to have "sometimes" (adj) before "forget" (verb).

Part 2: Corrections
Thus,*** {better: Therefore} for me to achieve my goal of fluency, I'm going in to English classes five days a week with the Callan Method****, watching English channels on TV and Netflix with English legendssubtitles, I subscribed on to some YouTube channels that teach English and now, I'm also on italki.

I hope to achieve my goal soon and I am striving {better: working} hard for it!

***"Thus" sounds very formal.

****Or: ...a week using the Callan Method

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