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Hi,you guys!My name is Lulu,and that is my first time to write something on italki.I know I may make some mistakes on this essay,but……I am really glad to recerive the correct from you.
I am a student in the university,and I will become a junior student in the next month.My major is Journalism and I really like it.
Today I spent whole day with my best friend and we hung out in a mall.And we met our common friend while we were walking .What a coincidence! We haven't met each other for nearly five years!Then,we sat down and talked about the things happened on us recently,it was really enjoyable.I am very happy for I spent a meaningful day with my friend!
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Hello！
Hi,you guys!My name is Lulu,and that is my first time to write writing something on italki. I know I may make some mistakes on in this essay, but……I am really glad to recerive receive the correct corrections from you.I am a student in the at university, and I will become a junior student first year in the next month. My major is Journalism and I really like/enjoy it.
Today I spent the whole day with my best friend and we hung out in a mall and we met our common mutual friend while we were walking. What a coincidence! We haven't met each other for nearly five years! Then, We sat down and talked about the things that happened to on us recently, it was really enjoyable. I am very happy for that I spent a meaningful day with my friend!
Only bit to explain is the use of "Then". I deleted it from your second last sentence "Then, we sat down.....". Then always looks back to the last thing you wrote/talked about, so in this case it refers back to not meeting each other for 5 years, but I think what you wanted to refer back to was just after you met in the mall. You would have to rewrite that idea at the beginning of the sentence to bring the story together properly e.g. "After we bumped into each other, we sat down and talked....".
Hope it makes sense :)
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Actually,she called me first,then I started to recognize her with great care……But,I don't think is a good thing for me,because that means my face didn't change in the last 5 years(cry……),I thought I became more beautiful than before!!(I am crying,leave me alone!)
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Can you still recognize your friends when you had been apart so long????_(:з」∠)_
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WOW,what an amazing essay you've made,keep it up,and finally you will be advanced in English!(I am just encourging myself,lol!!)
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