The birds secret
It was almost sunset, the light of the sun was falling from the side, making soft shadows, nature appearing in all its beauty. I was walking along the country field with my little sister. Silhouetess of birds sat on electric wires and preening their feathers. Then my sister asked me:
- Teacher told us, that if a man will touch this electric wires he will feel huge pain and can get to the hospital...Why birds sit there and nothing happening for them?
I thought for a few seconds. I knew that there must be some physical law but I forgot it and just said to my little sister:
- Because birds fly during the whole day and become very tired. They need an energy, that is why they sit there. They are charging their batteries from that wires. Look how that bird shakes! It's almost fully charged!
My sister and I looked at each other and instantly loudly laughed, the echo spread through the fields, and the birds flew away.
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The birds secret
It was almost sunset, the light of the sun was falling from the side, making soft shadows, nature appearing in all its beauty. I was walking along the country field with my little sister. Silhouetess of birds sat on electric wires and preening their feathers. Then my sister asked me:- Teacher told us, that if a man will touch this electric wires he will feel huge pain and can get to the hospital...Why birds sit there and nothing happening for them?
I thought for a few seconds. I knew that there must be some physical law but I forgot it and just said to my little sister:
- Because birds fly during the whole day and become very tired. They need an energy, that is why they sit there. They are charging their batteries from that those wires. Look at how that bird shakes! It's almost fully charged!
My sister and I looked at each other and instantly loudly laughed laughed loudly , the echo spread through the fields, and the birds flew away.
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The birds bird's secret (means the secret of one bird) or the birds' secret, meaning the secret of many birds) *don't forget the apostrophy to signify possession of something*
It was almost sunset, the light of the sun was falling from the side, making soft shadows, nature appearing in all its beauty. I was walking along the country field with my little sister. There were Silhouetess of birds sat sitting on electric wires and preening their feathers. *Choose one tense- past or present- and put all verbs in that tense* Then my sister asked me:- Our teacher told us, that if a man will touch touches this these electric wires, he will feel huge huge is usually used only for objects, like a huge dog. You can't say huge pain, or huge feelings, for example. It would be "a lot of pain", or "strong feelings". a lot of pain and can get will goto the hospital...Why birds sit there and nothing happening for them? How are the birds sitting there without anything happening to them? You can use the tense of (present continuous(?) , for example "how are they are sitting there",because you are speculating about their action RIGHT now. But, you could say also, "how do they sit there' if you want to make a general question, meaning "how do they sit there every day".
I thought for a few seconds. I knew that there must be some physical law but I forgot it and just said to my little sister:
"Because birds fly during the whole day and become very tired, they . They need an energy, that which is why they sit there. We usually don't start sentences with because, but if we do, it needs to be like an "if, then" statement. "Because birds fly a lot, they often get very thirsty". Your first sentence was like saying " если ты хочешь". You need to have something after it, like "если ты хочешь, мы сможем пойти в кино". I think! They are charging their batteries from that those/these wires. Look how that bird shakes is shaking! He is shaking right now, so it is present continous. It's almost fully charged!
My sister and I looked at each other and instantly loudly laughed, the echo spread through the fields, and the birds flew away.
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The birds secret
It was almost sunset; the last fading light of the sun was falling on the landscape from just above the horizon, casting soft shadows over the landscape and showing nature in all its beauty.
I was walking across a country field with my little sister, and we could see silhouettes of birds sitting on electric wires and preening their feathers.
Then my sister asked me:"My teacher told us, that when a man will touches this a live wire, he will get a painful shock and may need to be taken to the hospital... So, why is it that when birds sit there, nothing happens to them?"
I thought for a few seconds. I knew that there must be some scientific reason for it, but I have forgotten what it is, so I just said to my little sister: "Because birds fly throughout the whole day, they become very tired. They need an energy, and that is why they sit there. They are charging their batteries with those wires. Look how that bird is shaking ! It's almost fully charged!
My sister and I looked at each other and immediately laughed aloud,with the echo of our laughter being spread throughout the field, and scaring the birds which then flew away.
* A good attempt at writing a story with a descriptive backdrop
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Thank you :)
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Nice story.
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