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A wonderful party Last Saturday my husband and I attended a summer party in my son's kindergarten. Firstly, there was a fairy tale drama. The Principal dressed as an owl, presided over the whole drama. There were five classes in this kindergarten, so the students in different classes dressed as different animals. My elder son dressed as a bee and danced with the girls together. After the performance, he told me he like dancing and asked me what was the next time for dancing. I guessed he may become a good dancer if he had a passion to keep learning to dance, just like Billy Elliot who was a famous male dancer in England. My younger son dressed as a bat. However, he fell asleep on his teacher's lap when it was time to perform because his show was the last one. Therefore, we called him sleeping bat from then on. After the performance, we spent 10 Euros to buy 13 lottery tickets from a man who dressed as a mushroom. Each lottery ticket can redeem a gift, so we got 13 items which were toys and books. The first price was a yellow car. A lucky girl won it and drove it home directly. Everyone clapped for her. Then we went to canteen to eat some cakes. My sons' good friend came to show us his new gift-- a stick book for European Cup. Each stick has a famous football star on it. So they played it together. What a enjoyable party!

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A wonderful party

Last Saturday my husband and I attended a summer party in my son's kindergarten. Firstly, there was a fairy tale drama. The Principal dressed as an owl and presided over the whole drama. There were five classes in this kindergarten, so the students in different classes dressed as different animals. My elder son dressed as a bee and danced with the girls together. After the performance, he told me he liked dancing and asked me what was the next time for dancing. I thought he might become a good dancer if he had a passion to keep learning to dance, just like Billy Elliot who was a famous male dancer in England. My younger son dressed as a bat. However, he fell asleep on his teacher's lap when it was time to perform because his show was the last one. Therefore, we've been calling him a sleeping bat from then on.
After the performance, we spent 10 Euros to buy 13 lottery tickets from a man who was dressed as a mushroom. Each lottery ticket can redeem (?) a gift, so we got 13 items which were toys and books. The first prize was a yellow car. A lucky girl won it and drove it home directly. Everyone clapped for her.
Then we went to a canteen to eat some cakes. My sons' good friend came to show us his new gift-- a stick book for the European Cup. Each stick has a famous football star on it. So they played with it together.
What an enjoyable party!
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A Wonderful Party

Last Saturday, my husband and I attended a summer fancy/custome party held in my son's kindergarten. Firstly, There was also a fairy tale concert. The Principal, who dressed up as an owl,  presided over the whole concert.

There are five classes in his kindergarten, so and the students from the different classes dressed themselves up as different animals.

My elder son dressed up as a bee and danced together with the girls together.

After the performance, he told me that he likes dancing and asked me when would be was the next time he could dance again.

> Mixing tenses note : He told me he likes ."Told " is in the past tense , but why use "likes", which is in the present tense?? The reason is because he still like to dance now . If you used "liked", it means he liked in then but not now.

Example > He told me that Beijing is in China >> Was in China XXX

There were 5 classes in the kindergarden > You mean the no. of classes has changed since then ?? If it is still 5 classes today , use "are" .

I guessed he could become a good dancer if he had the passion to keep on learning how to dance, just like Billy Elliot, who was a famous male dancer from England.

My younger son dressed as a bat. However, he fell asleep on his teacher's lap when it was time for him to perform, because his performance was the last one, and it was getting late by then.

Therefore Because of this incident, we called him "Sleeping bat" from then onwards .

After the performance, we spent 10 Euros to buy on 13 lottery tickets from a man who dressed up as a mushroom.

Each lottery ticket was redeemable for a gift, so we got 13 items, which were toys and books, from our tickets .

The first price was a yellow car. A lucky girl won it and drove it home straight away.

Everyone clapped for her.

Then Later we went to the canteen to eat some cakes.> Later we went to the canteen, where we ate some cakes.

My sons' good friend came over to show us his new gift: a sticker book on the European Cup.

Each sticker has a picture of a famous football star on it. So Then they played with it together.
What an enjoyable party!

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