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Note [The Tokyo Gas Attack in 1995] Please help me to correct my essay>< I tried my best to fix simple errors but I'm not pretty sure about grammars>< This is the first paragraph of my research paper about The Tokyo GAs Attack. If you are familiar with essays or MLA format, please teach me some rules that I definitely should know. More than 5000 people had injured and 12 people had killed by the Tokyo underground sarin gas attack in 1995.(Watt, 569) This very first biochemical terroristic attack that happened in the capital of Japan shocked all over the world and illuminated terror of an alternative biochemical indiscriminate terrorist attack. Tokyo was considered as a highly secure country, however, this terrorism attack caused to consider about security to raise caution for domestic terrorism and strength security for the domestic terrorism attack. To figure out what extent did the Tokyo gas attack of 1995 influence Japan’s approach to security, this summative will identify security and compare the security structures before and after the gas attack with the understanding of Japanese cultural socio-psychological features. An analysis of Tokyo gas attack reveals the issue in Japan’s security: lack of security enforcement to against terroristic attack, very collective mindset as cultural code, a strong band of hierarchy by social positions.

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Until then, Tokyo/Japan was considered as a highly secure city/country [you used Tokyo as a reference, so you must say "city," since it's a city and not a country; or change Tokyo to Japan], however but this terrorism attack caused many to consider question about their country's security to raise caution for defense against domestic terrorism and strength security for the domestic terrorism attack [it seems like you tried to give a lot information here, but simple is good most times]. this The following summative summary will, in order to figure out what extent did how much the Tokyo gas attack of 1995 influenced Japan’s approach to security, identifies and compares its security structures before and after the gas attack with the emphasis on understanding of Japanese's cultural and socio-psychological features. An Analysis of the Tokyo gas attack reveals the issue in Japan’s security: a lack of security enforcement to against terroristic attacks, very collective mindset as cultural code, a strong band of hierarchy by social positions.

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Corrections Part 1

More than 5,000 people were injured and 12 people were had killed by in the Tokyo underground sarin gas attack in 1995 (Watt, 569). This very  was the first biochemical terroristic attack that happened to occur in Tokyo, the capital city of Japan, which shocked all over the world and illuminated highlighted ["illuminated" doesn't work so well in this case] the terror that of an indiscriminate alternative biochemical attack can cause terrorist attack [I wouldn't use the same term twice in one sentence].

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