Just writing about my dog
I love my dog for two reasons. The first one is because my daddy gave it away to me. On November 11th of 2004 my father and I were walking on the street when we suddenly saw a white furr ball in a box and at that instant we both fell in love with him. The second reason is because he is a loyal companion. When I'm sad he's there, when I'm happy he's there and he knows that when I'm angry he shouldn't be there. In conclusion my love makes my life more enjoyable because of the decision my father made that day.
I know I made a lot of errors so please help xD
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Just writing about my dog.
I love my dog for two reasons. The first one is, because my daddy gave it away to me. On November 11th of 2004, my father and I were walking on the street when we suddenly saw a white fur ball in a box and, at that instant, we both fell in love with him. The second reason is, because he is a loyal companion. When I'm sad, he's there; when I'm happy, he's there and he knows that when I'm angry, he shouldn't be there. In conclusion, my love makes my life more enjoyable, because of the decision my father made that day.I know I made a lot of errors so please help xD
"On November 11th of 2004, my father and I were walking on the street..."
On is correct technically, though a more common way of saying it is:
"On November 11th of 2004, my father and I were walking down the street..."
You can use whichever, though.
Really good overall. Your English is good, and the only things to change here are the commas and semicolons. Congrats! ^-^
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