<The Ocean>

<The Ocean>

Once I saw the ocean while by its side
it wouldn't let slip its mystery from the depths
and tell how to fathom its expanse so wide.
Wondering about that blue so broad one could sink in,
a boy, passing by, whispered a song
giving his joy to the fish and plunged in.
A voice came along with the ocean wind
which caressed this soul of mine
and called my name wetly and dearly
with its greatest tenderness sublime
and comfortably melted me by its genius divine

I tried to keep the rhythm and what I perceived to be the sentiment of your poem when amending it. I put in 'sublime' for the sake of rhyme; as it was before, the previous line didn't really hold. I hope you like the changes -  very nice poem.

Once I saw the ocean₁ while sitting aside
it₂ wouldn't slip its₂ mystery out of the depth
and tell how to range across its₂ wide₃
Wondering that blue broadness to seep₄ oneself in
a boy passing by whispered a song₅
giving his joy to the fish and plunged in
A voice came along with the ocean wind
which was caressing the soul of mine
called my name wetly₆ and dearly
with greatest tenderness it₂ could hold
as comforter melted me by its genius₇ divine

Notes:

Once I saw the ocean_1: Why only once? Don’t use the verb “saw” the ocean unless you’ve seen it from a distance.

it_2: Overuse of the word “it.” Unless “it” is the title of your poem, your word use does not reveal any new information.

tell how to range across its₂ wide_3: This line is awkwardly phrased. “How wide was its range” is what you meant but even that phrase only states the obvious.

seep_4: Seep should be used to enter into an extremely small space, not a broad expanse.

a boy passing by whispered a song_5: In writing, especially poetry, never introduce a new character without warning. A singing boy who does not interact with the main character is a waste of space.

wetly_6: If an Ocean had a voice, it would not speak wetly. Try to say something wetly. Go ahead. Try it. You can’t do it, right?

genius_7: The qualities of an ocean cannot be genius, unless the ocean does something extraordinary with its power, something we had not seen before.