TOEFL INDIPENDENT WRITING TASK - 1
This is a short text i wrote while pricticing for my TOEFL indipendent writing task.
The subject was people seeking and not seeking indipendece from parents.
LEAVING THE NEST
Growing up in life a man or a woman is challenged in many situations, work, firends, school and even hobbies-related activities can be the theater of uneasy situations. In the early part of a man's life, every situation, good or bad that it is, sees a sipervising figure watching over the child steps and aiding some, if needed. Parents teaches us not only to walk and speak, but olso how to behave and how to react at other people's behaving. An inmportant task that parents should accomplish is to teach to their sons and daughters how tho get what they want, how to estabilish a goal and how to move along the path of completing it.
All this is to say that, to me, this is the difference between young adults that seek indipendency and ones that do not. If a person knows what he wants, and how to obtain it, soon he will develope autonomy in decisions and autonomous thinking. A person like that will experience many things on his own along his growth, thus developing personal tastes and desires. Otherwise, if parents fail to give their pupils the right autonomy in goal setting and achieving, there will be always the need for a supervising figure in the pupil's life. The adult that will result from that pupil will always need to be adviced, guided, watched and protected, in the worse cases even from himself.
The desire of leaving the parents and the family is a strict necessity to people of the first kind, who need space to express their own tastes, to make their choices and mistakes with increasing autonomy. Otherwise, as birds do, a person who is not seeking aoutonomy will be glad to be fed from his parent's mouth, metaphorically speaking. Ultimately i am convinced that seeking indipendency is crucial to a mature and stable person, thus my best choice would be to seek it; but more important, i think, is not to choose indipendency, but to grow up like a person who needs it.
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TOEFL INDIEPENDENT WRITING TASK - 1
This is a short text iI wrote while priacticing for my TOEFL indeipendent writing task.
The subject was people seeking and not seeking indiependence from parents.
LEAVING THE NEST
Growing up in life a man or a woman is challenged in many situations, by work, firendsfriends, school and even hobbiesy-related activities. can be the theater of uneasy situations. In the early part of a man's life, every situation, good or bad thatas it is, sees a sipervisingsupervising figure watching over the child's steps and aiding somegiving some aid, if needed. Parents teaches us not only to walk and speak, but oalso how to behave and how to react at other people's behaviorng. An inmportant task that parents should accomplish is to teach to their sons and daughters how tho get what they want, how to estabilish a goal and how to move along the path of completingachieving it. [You complete a task to achieve a goal.]
All this is to say that, to me, this is the difference between young adults thatwho seek indipendencey and ones that do not. If a person knows what he wants, and how to obtain it, soon he will develope autonomy in decisions and autonomous thinking. A person like that will experience many things on his own along his path of growth, thus developing personal tastes and desires. Otherwise, if parents fail to give their pupilsoffspring the right autonomy in goal setting and achievementing, there will be always be the need for a supervising figure in the pupilchild's life. The adult that will result from that pupilchild will always need to be advisced, guided, watched and protected, in the worse cases even from himself.
The desire of leavingto leave the parents and the family is a strict necessity tofor people of the first kind, [???, non capisco "il primo tipo"] who need space to express their own tastes, and to make their choices and mistakes with increasing autonomy. Otherwise, as birds do, a person who is not seeking aoutonomy will be glad to be fed from his parent's mouth, metaphorically speaking. Ultimately Ii am convinced that seeking indeipendencey is crucial to becoming a mature and stable person, thus mythe best choice would be to seek it; but it is more important, iI think, is not to chooseseek indeipendencey, but to grow up likeas a person who needs it.
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