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The Feeling Of Soap Opera < Snow Leopard > Recently, I have been watching a soap opera named < snow leopard >. It's a film about our China fighting with Japan in the second world war. I hate Japanese, because they killed lots of Chinese people in the war. They still killed lots of kids, women, older people. But a Japanese character who is called 竹下俊 was good in the film. He loved peace, he had his own rules as people. Before he was dead, he cut off his right arm to make up for the main character who is called 周卫国. Then he asked 周卫国 to kill him to complete the soldier's duty. Because both of them are soldiers , they have to carry out the order. I was moved by that Japanese soldier. If all the Japanese were people like him, at least , there was no the second world war in Asia.

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The Feeling Of A Soap Opera < Snow Leopard >

Recently, I've been watching a soap opera called, < Snow Leopard >.
It's a film about our China fighting with Japan in the second world war. I hate the Japanese, because they killed a lot of Chinese people in the war. They still killed lots of kids, women and older people, however a Japanese character named 竹下俊 was good in the film. He loved peace, he had his own rules for dealing with people. Before he was killed, he cut off his right arm to apologize to the main character who is called 周卫国. Then he asked 周卫国 him to kill him to complete the soldier's duty. Since both of them were soldiers , they had to carry out the order. I was moved by that Japanese soldier. If all the Japanese were people like him, maybe there wouldn't have been a second world war for Asia.

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WOW you did a great job! Big improvement. I'll check it now.
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Nancy, did I follow the 4 basic things that you told me? By the way ,I put 2 space before a paragraph ,but I don't know why they didn't display.

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