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As a This chart shows the numbers of students (men and women, in thousands) studying further education in three periods between 1970/1971, 1980/1981 and 1990/1991 in Britain.

First, full-time education: In 1970/71 with 100,000 and 1980/81 with 170,000, there were more male students attending further education than women in the same period. (Looking at the chart, there were more women in full-time education in 1980/81). In the third period, 1990/91, the women were leading attendance with 1250. (It looks like in 1990/91, men and women were both at around 275,000).

Second, part-time education: the same tendency as part-time. Men were leading in 1970/71, and they were slightly ahead in 1980/81, while women were leading in 1990/91.

Finally, we can consider both full and part-time education at the beginning of 1970 and 1980 more men attending to further school. (It looks like the combined full and part-time students were higher for men in 1970, approximately equal for men and women in 1980, and higher for women in 1990). In 1990, the opportunities to include women were increasing considerably more than men. 

I'm really sorry, but I think you might have misread some information on the chart. I usually try not to make very many changes on people's entries, but I don't want you to use the wrong information on your exam. I hope these corrections are not overwhelming! Good luck on your exam. 

writting taks 1 chart :)

Hello friends. I need to practice my writing ability for a test, and I would like that you help me to correct certain errors in the text, Feel free to make any observation :) thanks. the instructions are attached in the picture.

As a the chart show shows, it is reflected the numbers of students ( men and women in thousands) studying further education in three periods between 1970/1971, 1980/1981and 1990/1991 in Britain.

First , part- time education in 1970/71 with 100 and 1980/81 with 170 there were more male students attending further education than women in the same period. In the third period 1990/91 the women leading attending with 1250.

Second, Full-time education, the same tendency as part-time. Men leading the two first periods, and woman leading the third.

Finally, We can consider both full and part time education at the beginning of 1970 and 1980 more men attending to further school. In 1990, the opportunity to include women were increasing considerably more than men.

writting taks 1 chart :)

Hello friends. I need to practice my writing ability for a test, and I would like that you help me to correct certain errors in the text, Feel free to make any observation :) thanks. the instructions are attached in the picture.

As a chart show the numbers of students ( men and women in thousands) studying further education in three periods between 1970/1971, 1980/1981and 1990/1991 in Britain.

First , part- time education in 1970/71 with 100 and 1980/81 with 170 there were more male students attending further education than women in the same period. In the third period 1990/91 the women leading attending with 1250.

Second, Full-time education, the same tendency as part-time. Men leading the two first periods, and woman leading the third.

Finally, We can consider both full and part time education at the beginning of 1970 and 1980 more men attending to further school. In 1990, the opportunity to include women were increasing considerably more than men.

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          This chart shows the numbers of students (men and women, in thousands) studying further education in three periods between 1970/1971, 1980/1981 and 1990/1991 in Britain.

          First, full-time education: In the first period: In 1970/81, men were higher with 100,000. Woman are leading in 1980/81, and they in 1990/91 almost equal for men around 22,000.

          Second, part-time education: Men were leading in 1970/71, and they were slightly ahead in 1980/81, while women were leading in 1990/91.

          The combined full and part-time students were higher for men in 1970, approximately equal for men and women in 1980, and higher for women in 1990.