Investment p  Proposal

Dear CoolBox producers, [a name would be preferable]

I would like to make a valuable business proposal, as I was much impressed by your product presentation [where? conference? board meeting?]. Firstly [Firstly is very old and formal, not commonly used], your product is definetely definitely worth spreading excellent and shows great market potential, [just a suggestion] especially throughout southern countries ["countries with warm climates" or something like that may be better?]. Secondly, [this is OK; we often start lists with First, then continue with 'secondly,' 'thirdly,' and so on. However, "First, second, third, etc." is more common and often sounds better] you re presented the real accurate [I think this is what you wanted to say?] figures that which confirm a positive tendency trajectory in the next quarter of 2015. And Finally, you are thinking about the future of your product!

As you probably may know, I am an ["an" or "the"? Is there one owner or several?] owner of the [Name?] investment company, which was established in 1992. and Since that time, many independant independent entrepreneurs and firms have been got received my significant support both my financial and social media [is that what you're trying to say?] support (as the competent communications play an important role along with the monetary investments) from my company.

Therefore, having w With more than 10 years of experience in the area of business development investments, [is that what you were trying to say?] I can guarantee you  a success if you accept my proposal of the 50 %-stake a 50% stake in your business.

Then i Therefore, if you are seeking for a reliable business partner you are welcome to contact me.
The details of the proposal are included in the enclosed contract.

Investment proposal

Dear CoolBox producers,

I would like to make a valuable business proposal following your impressive product presentation.

Firstly, I see real value in selling your product in southern Europe. Secondly, you presented accurate figures confirming a positive trajectory in the next quarter of 2015. Finally, you are thinking about the future of your product!

As you already know, I am the owner of an investment company which was established in 1992 and since that time many independant entrepreneurs and firms have been given significant support, financially and socially (as the competent communications play an important role along with the investments).
Therefore, having over 10 years of experience in the area of investment, I guarantee you success if you accept my proposal of 50 % stake in your business.

If you are seeking a reliable business partner, we look forward to working with you soon.

The details of the proposal are included in the enclosed contract.