my essay I need to prepare for the IELTS exam
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Some working parents believe childcare centres can provide best care for children, others think other family members like grandparents can do this job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
--- My answer ---
It is true that the parents often wonder whether they ought to provide children with care of daycare centers or not. While many people suppose that children receiving cares from their family members can be developed well, I would argue that institutional cares are much better.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why the parents have a tendency of choosing a home-based care. Firstly, it is a recognition that caring for youngsters in home satisfies the condition that is safe for children. Those who can be grandparents receiving the responsibility of paying attention to children is likely to spend a plenty of time for doing this. By this way, grandparents take care of all children's activities, which would be less injuries or accidents. Furthermore, children could be easy to make close relationship with family members. If individuals do not belong to their family, the young are probably unconfident, even be scared.
On the other hand, I believe that the young are under the care of care centers is beneficial in some ways. One major advantage is that they are often live in educated environment. This is because childcare centers usually hire skilled staffs who have abilities and skills enough to foster the young. Another benefit is that children can be nurtured essential skills. Those centers often have sufficient facilities to provide them a full of activities such as art, reading and outdoors. Such activities allow children to push their imagination and learn vital skills such as collaborative and self-discipline skills.
In conclusion, although both nurturing youngsters in home and taking them to daycare centers are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to take care of children in daycare centers.
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Thanks for your comment . i will wait your correction.
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I feel like many times in colloquial English we omit "that" (when used after a verb..."think that", etc), but in certain situations "that" sounds better. I will correct this then :)
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hix I forgot my friend advice about adding "that" in my title :))
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