English Practice 2

Today is Monday, the ninth of March. The weather? Not bad, windy, and the sights are always special in winter. What did I do today? I watched "Desperate wifves" (did you mean 'Desperate Housewives'?) and ate and had my hair cut. And I met an old friend when walking on the road. She was a classmate from grade 1 to grade 6, and we live in the same village. her Her home is just steps' away from my home. We used to play together, we were very close, like bffs. But I didn't know there is a word "BFF", and it turns out we are not close anymore. When I go to grade 7, I have to live in dormitories in at school. I came home every Friday and went back to school every Monday morning. One day I heard from my grandmother that she caught a really bad disease and might die. I was really shocked, and afraid of running into her in the street or seeing her. As time went by, I was having difficulty in accustoming myself becoming accustomed (or you could say 'adjusting myself') to living in a dormitory and I decided not to live in at school anymore, so I rode my bike to school every day. It was a long distance and there were bad weather conditions. When I was in grade 9, I started to concentrate more on my studies and decided to live in at school again. I was busy every day and time went quickly fast (many English speakers will use 'fast' in this situation in conversation, but technically it is incorrect because you need an adverb- however, if you do use 'fast,' many English speakers will not notice the error or correct you!). Of course, laughters and tears were always with me during my whole time as a junior life. She My friend (I would use 'my friend' here because it has been a few sentences since you last mentioned her- I needed a reminder of which 'she' you meant!) quit junior school because of the disease and I heard that she had to suffer from medical treatments. I didn't and never will understand or feel how she felt. And I've seen her for only a few times. I rememer when she was better, an old friend (all of us grew up together) and I went to visit her, and I said I would make a little gift for her. However, that didn't come true, I forgot that gift, knowing she was ill, It Knowing that she was ill gave me a feeling that it's it was just so unreal and sudden. I found myself so easy to accustome myself become accustomed to new conditions situations after I graduated from junior school. Even the bad thngs, even something things I hated, even became someone I despise before (I do not understand what you mean here), I handled it well. After I knew that she was healed I wasn't that excited and thrilled. Once I visited her and found that she was boring. At that time, I also was suffering from my quitting decision to quit (you could also say 'my having quit') school. I had a book about how to design photographs and I thought I can could give it to her so that she could read it for fun. But something stopped me from making my thoughts into action like always. I have those caring thoughts and I was stockedto make it happen (do you mean 'stopped from making it happen'?) but after a while, I lost the excitment. Little by little, all my friends, we were still becoming distant, still. What can we do about real things? Accept.

Very good! Your tone is a bit conversational, this would be fine if you are speaking with someone. However, if you were writing a paper you might want to use a more formal voice with clearer sentences and grammar. I also notice that you like to make long sentences with commas (we call them 'runon sentences' because they run on and on!) It is usually clearer if you break them up into smaller sentences like I did in my corrections).