Introduce

I want to work for Starbucks because i heard it's well managed and cares for the welfare of its employees. I came to Canada to learn English and for self-improvement, but I have a work permit. The reason is I want to pay money for everything by myself, so I have to work. And in the case of Starbucks, they have chain stores around the world. I think there is reason for it. So, I want to work for Starbucks and not another store.

The weakness I have is lack of English, but in the case of orders, the patterns are similar so I think I will be able to master taking orders. And I really want to speak English very well and make friends. My roommate says that I am very friendly. I think I am friendly too. So, I will to work hard and have good relationships with co-workers.

I think the two corrections above me did a great job helping with corrections. I thought I would share how to make it coversational. :}

Introduce  Introduction

I want to work for Starbucks because I hear it's well-managed and cares about the welfare of its employees heard it's well manager abd cares for the welfare of its employees. I came to Canada for to learn English and self-improvement to improve myself, but I have need a work permit. The reason is  I want to pay money for everything by myself, so I have to work. And in case of As for Starbucks, they have chain stores in whole locations all over the world. I think there is a reason for it. So, I want to work for Starbucks, not another store.

Weakness I have is lack English My weakness is English, but in case of order since the order patterns are similar, I will to master how to take orders. And I really want to speak English very well and make friends. My roommate says that I am very friendly. I think so too i am friendly also. So I will to work hard and have good relationships with partners others.

Hi there! Nice job on your notebook entry! I've mostly corrected for grammar/spelling, with some slight changes to make some of your ideas a bit clearer. :-)

Introduction

I want to work for Starbucks, because I've heard it's well managed and cares for the welfare of its employees. I came to Canada to learn English and for self-improvement, but I need a work permit. The reason is that I want to pay money for everything by myself, so I have to work. And in the case of Starbucks, they have chain stores in the whole world, and I think there is a good reason for this. As such, I want to work for Starbucks and not another store.

A weakness I have is a lack of English skills, but in case of orders, the patterns tend to be similar, so I think I will to master taking orders. Also, I really want to speak English very well and make friends. My roommate says that I am very friendly. I also think I am friendly. So I will to work hard and have good relationships with my friends and colleagues.