Athletes as Good Role Models for Young

Nowadays, many professional athletes are not only sportsmen but also super stars in society, especially those who own have won championships in some international competitions. Therefore As a result, some people regard them as good role models for adolescents, while others keep maintain the opposite opinions opinion.

With emphasizing emphasis on the importance of exercise to health, more and more people take part in sports activities and select some famous athletes of in their favorite fields as idols. First of all, there is no doubt that the outstanding stamina and self-discipline of some athletes are worthy to be of being admired and learned. These are qualities which are the keys to reaching goals in the almost all situations. Namely They are the real examples of achieving achievement through hardworking hard work that could effectively encourage the young generation to make efforts by themselves on their own in order to acquire a better improve their life. In addition, the sportsmanship, which is reflected from in professional players’ behaviors, represents many good personalities and personal qualities, such as humility, patriotism and teamwork. Up to a point, these characters characteristics are the pivotal factors to that promote social solidarity and harmony.

On the contrary other hand, starting to train in training at a very young age, makes childhood for a professional sports player players’ childhood be crammed (filled) with injury and perspiration, instead of friendship and parents’ company. As a result, without the monitor guidance of coaches, it is hard to imitate by bring common juveniles to success in this way, which even seems cruel that to let young children face such physical and mental suffering. Furthermore, because of lacking due to the lack of social contact, professional athletes are apt to be treated (pressured?)and enticed. There is a typical example that A successful American swimmer named Philips presents a typical example. He disappointed a lot of young people who regarded him as a hero when he was exposed for after the exposure of taking drugs several years ago.

Overall In conclusion, although many qualities of professional sportsmen are excellent, the youth still need to improve their ability of to exercise good judgement and to choose appropriate role models. Meanwhile the athletes should take responsibility for setting good examples.

Interesting topic. This is mostly well written, though I'm not sure what you mean in the middle of the third paragraph.  

Athletes as Good Role Models for Young

Nowadays, many professional athletes are not only sportsmen but also super stars in society, especially those who own are champions in some international competitions. Therefore, some people regard them as good models for adolescents, while others keep hold the opposite opinions.

With doctors emphasizing the importance of exercise to health, more and more people take part in sports activities and select some famous athletes of their favorite fields as idols. First of all, there is no doubt that the outstanding stamina and self-discipline of some athletes are worthy to be admired and learned, which and are the keys to reaching goals in the almost all situations. Namely, they are the real examples of achieving through hardworking that which could effectively encourage the younger generation to make efforts by themselves towards acquireing a better life. In addition, the sportsmanship, which is reflected from in professional players’ behaviors, represents many good personalities and qualities, such as humility, patriotism and teamwork. Up to a point, these characteristics are the pivotal factors to which promote social solidarity and harmony.

On the contrary, starting to train in at a very young age makes professional sports players’ childhood be crammed with injury and perspiration, instead of friendship and parents’ company. As a result, without the monitor of coaches, it is hard for normal children to imitate by common juveniles to success in this way, which even seems even more cruel that let young children face such physical and mental sufferings. Further more, because of lacking they lack social contact, professional athletes are apt to be treated and enticed. There is a typical example that a successful American swimmer named Philips disappointed a lot of young people who had regarded him as a hero, after the exposure of taking drugs several years ago.

Overall, although many qualities of professional sportsmen are excellent, the youth still need to improve the ability of judgement to choose in choosing appropriate role models, meanwhile the athletes should take responsibilitiesy for setting good examples.

Athletes as Good Role Models for the Young

Nowadays, many professional athletes are not only sportsmen, but also superstars in society, especially those who are champions in some international competitions. Therefore, some people regard them as “good role models” for adolescents, while others have the opposite opinion.

While emphasizing the importance of exercise for health, more and more people take part in sporting activities and select some famous athlete from their favorite sport as an idol. First of all, there is no doubt that outstanding stamina and self-discipline of some athletes are worthy to be admired and learned, which are the keys to reach goals in almost any situation. Namely, they are the real examples of achieving through hard work that could effectively encourage the younger generation to make efforts, by themselves, to acquire a better life. In addition, sportsmanship, which is reflected from professional players’ behaviors, represents many good attributes and qualities, such as humility, patriotism, and teamwork. Up to a point, these characteristics are the pivotal factors to promote social solidarity and harmony.

On the contrary, starting to train at a very young age puts professional sports players at risk for a multitude of childhood injuries.They also have less time to cultivate friendships and spend time with family because of their strenuous sports schedule. As a result, without the monitoring by coaches, it is hard for young players to succeed in sports as a profession. This seems cruel that they allow young children to suffer both physically and mentally . Furthermore, because of lacking social contact, professional athletes are apt to be led astray. A typical example of this is the American swimmer named Michael Phelps (who was exposed for taking drugs several years ago), he disappointed a lot of young people that regarded him as a hero.

Although many qualities of professional sportsmen are excellent, the youth still need to improve their ability to choose appropriate role models. Meanwhile the athletes should also take responsibility for setting good examples.

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Athletes as Good Role Models for Young People

Nowadays, many professional athletes are not only sportsmen but also super stars in society, especially those who are champions in some international competitions. Therefore, some people regard them as good role models for adolescents, while others have the opposite opinion.

With the emphasis on the importance of exercise to health, more and more people are taking part in sports activities, and they often select famous athletes as idols. First of all, there is no doubt that the stamina and self-discipline of some athletes are worthy of admiration. These qualities are keys in reaching goals for almost all situations. These athletes are true examples of achievment through hardwork. They have the ability to motivate the youth to work hard, and to strive to make a better life for themselves. In addition, good sportsmanship (which is reflected in the behavior or the players both on and off the field) can encourage improvements in character traits such as humility, patriotism and teamwork. In a way, these athletes are pivotal factors in promoting social solidarity and harmony.

However, forcing a child to train hard at a very young age can cause ones childhood to be crammed with practices and games, while taking away from time with friends and family. 

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