College Students' Job Hunting

It is difficult to hunt a job for college students these years days. College students is are more intelligent, well-educated, and know more new technology savvy and skill than ever before. Why they can't they find jobs? It is so strange! (This is not considered strange if you know the causes for these "results".)

There are many factors causing this reasult recent (trend) or (phenomonom). At first, Many college students are too confident willing to accept others' advice from parents and friends,when they find job about their job search instead of seeking advice from professional recruitors. If these students do find a job, they think all job can't match them become disallusion, believing the job does not meet their expecations. Secondly, many college students are single son or girl "only children" and they are surround by struggle to meet their parents expectation which has a great deal of influence on a Chinese student's mentality,when they step into society,they can't find a job which all person forcus on thier life,so they quit. What's more,those many college students study in school not apply to do not know what company's requirements are nowadays. At last, There are The biggest factor influencing why more and more college students can't find a job in the job market is supply and demand, and the market can't supply enough jobs.

I have some solutions to the problem in mind as below:
What can students do to overcome this trend? Parents and schools should pay much attention on to developing thier spirit of dealing the student's ability to deal with hardship. College students also should keep pace with society's development and know more about recruitment requirements. The government Country should encourage students to build their own enterprise.

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College Students' Job Hunting

It is difficult for college students to job hunt these days. College students are more intelligent, educated, and technological savvy than ever before. So why can't college students find jobs?

There are many factors influencing this recent trend. Many college students are too willing to accept advice from parents and friends about their job search activities instead of seeking advice from professional recruiters. If students do find a job, they often become disillusion, believing the job does not meet their expectations. Moreover, many college students in China are "only children" and they struggle to find jobs that would make their parents feel proud. What's more, many college students do not know what company's requirements are nowadays. However, the biggest factor influencing why more and more college students can't find a job in the job market is supply and demand, the market can't supply enough jobs.

What can students do to overcome this trend? Parents and schools should pay much more attention to developing the student's ability to deal with hardship and adversity. College students also should keep pace with societal trends and know more about recruitment requirements. Of course, the government could encourage students to build their own enterprises.

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College Students' Job Hunting Hunting for Jobs for College Students

It is difficult to hunt find a job for college students these years days (1). College students is are intelligent, well-educated and know more new technology and skills. Why they can't can't they find jobs? It is so strange!

There are many factors causing this reasult. At First, many college students are too confident to accept others' advice, when they find job, they think all job can't match them (2). Secondly (3), many college students are single son or girl don't have siblings, so they are surround by their parents. When they step into society, they can't find a job which all person forcus on thier life, so they quit (4). What's more, what those college students study in school does not apply to companies' requirements nowadays. At last Finally, there are more and more college students in the job market, and the market can't supply enough jobs.

I have some solutions to the problem in mind as below:
Parents and schools should pay much attention on to developing thier spirit of dealing hardship students' abilities to deal with hardship. College students also should keep pace with society's development and know more about recruitment requirements. Countries should encourage students to build their own enterprises.

1. "These days" is a phrase in English, which can mean a relatively long period of time. "These Years" doesn't exist.

2. I don't understand the second half of that sentence.

3. You have to be consistent. If you use "First", you have to use "Second." If you use "Firstly", you have to use "Secondly".

4. I don't understand this sentence.

You need to put spaces after punctuation. You had no spaces after commas, periods, or question marks.