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City Life in JiLin (2). Oh no! I havn't writing essay for six days. I will continue introducing the city life in JiLin to you. In my last essay, I say that the summer in Jilin city is very comfortable, but the winter in JiLin is very cold so that we dare not to go out in the morning or night. In winter day, you can see snow everywhere when JiLin city under a heavy snow, and you will see everyone who has the eyes bare in air only. If we went out for some shopping or something else, we must be more carefully because of the light ice on the road. The snow that took us a beautiful world also took us some trouble. It also took greatest happy. Children always very happy when there is snow. Parents are watching their children playing snow and laughing happiness.

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City Life in JiLin (2).

Oh no! I haven't written an essay for six days. I'll continue introducing  the city of JiLin. to you. In my last essay, I said that the summer in Jilin city is very comfortable, but the winter in JiLin is so very cold so that we dare not to go out in the morning or at night. On a winter day, after a heavy snow, you can see snow everywhere in JiLin. city under a heavy snow, and you will see everyone who has the eyes bare in air only. If we went out for some shopping or something else, we would have to be very more carefully because of the light ice on the road. While the snow that brings us a beautiful world, it also brings us some trouble but... it makes us very happy too! Children are always very happy when it snows. Parents enjoy watching their children being happy, playing and laughing in the snow. and laughing happiness.

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