The Education in China

In cChina, some of child children don't have the initiative (Grammatically correct, but the word "initative" isn't appropriate, I'm not sure what you're trying to say here). the pParents want their children to get a lucrative job when they graduate from college and have to look for works (Parents have to look for work?),so they force their children to go to the cram school and study all day.  and then,They therefore will never have time to do something that you'retheir interested in. The children don't want to live/be like that,but it isn't working,because the parents can beat their children when their children wereare disobedient. what a sad face fact it is!

A small tip: Sentences in English tend to be shorter than Chinese ones and should really only contain one idea or point.  Having shorter sentences makes texts more comprehendable while it's easy to get lost in a long sentences with lots of ideas and words like "and", "but" and "then".  

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The Education

In China,some children  of child don't have the initiative. ,Their parents want their them children to get a lucrative job when they graduate from college and have to look for a job. works,So they parents force their children to go to the cram school and  study all day,and as a result then,they will never have time to do something anything that you're they're interested in.The children don't want to like having to do this that, but it isn't work,means nothing asbecause the parents can beat their children when they are their children were disobedient, what a sad situation face it is!