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Silent A week ago he sat on the bench with sad eyes. Alone… He just looked to the empty air. The gentle wind tried to play with his brown curly hair. My feet strode away, more and more closer to him. On the same bench I sat beside him. My hand held a cotton candy. It was so big and I could hide my face behind it. My eyes stolen a glance to his gloomy face. One, two, … five minutes I still kept the eyes on him. But he was still in silent and did not move. “Something bad happened to his life, should I ask him?” “No!!!” Both of us were quite and I just ate my cotton candy then left him alone drown in his sadness memory. The second day I found him sat again on that bench. “What is going on with him? Oh okay! Why should I care about him”. Seven days pass by, and I feel so curious, until a crazy mind said to me “ Open his brain and you will find the answer!” Haishhh… “Again, Why should I care about him?”. But my curiosity was on the top of limit. A loud voice came from my mouth “What happen to you?”. I became freeze, the I talked to myself “What are you doing? Are you crazy? He just a stranger, Why do you keep thinking about him?”. He still in silent, but suddenly he stand and say one word “Sorry” and then left me alone. “Heeeeeeh…???” I looked at him until he disappeared in the crowd. I could not make my feet move. So many questions hanged on my head and I still could not get the answer. Be quite at a few moments, then I just realized that he had fade away. I sat on that bench, motionless, alone, and stare on empty space though many people around me. Haaaa, very absurd story =D

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Seven days came and went.  pass by,and I feel so curious, until aMy curiousity was unbearable and my crazy mind said tochided me,

 

“Open his brain up his head and you will find the answer!”

 

Haishhh… However, another voice said,

 

“Again, Why should I you care about him?”.

 

But In the end, my curiosity won. was on the top of limit. A My loud voice came from my mouth frothing out.

 

“What happened to you?”.

 

Immediately, I froze. became freeze, the I talked to myself My inner voice admonished,

 

“What are you doing? Are you crazy? He just a stranger. Why do you keep are you thinking about of him?”.

 

He was still in silent., but Suddenly he stand stood.  and say Just one word came out from his mouth,

“Sorry.”

 

and then left me alone. “Heeeeeeh…???” With this, he turned and left.  


"Eh!!!"

 

My mind screamed.  I was left speechless.  I looked at him his back until he disappeared in the crowd. I could not make my feet move. So many questions hanged on swirling in my head and I still could not get the no answer. Be quite quietat A few moments of solitude, then I just realized before I realized that he was long gonehad faded away. I sat on that bench, motionless, all alone, and staring at on the empty space even though there were many people around me.

Haaaa, very absurd story =D Not an absurd story.  A very good and intriguing one.  The reason I corrected it :)  Great job!

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Silence

A week ago, he sat on the bench with sad eyes. Alone… He just looked to the empty air. The gentle wind tried to play with his brown curly hair. My feet came strode away, more and more closer and ever closer to him. On the same bench I sat beside him. [not wrong but this is better] Then I sat next to him; my hand held out a stick of cotton candy. It was so big and fluffy that I could hide my face behind it. My eyes stolen a glance to at his gloomy face. One, two, … and five minutes later, I still kept the my eyes on him. But He was still in silence and did not move.

 

“Something bad must have happened to his life! Should I ask him?”


I thought to myself.

 

“No!!!”

 

I finally decided in my mind.  Both of us were quite quiet and I just ate my cotton candy; then left letting him alone drown in his sadness memory. The second day came and I found him sat sitting again on that same bench again.


“What is going on with him? Oh Okay! Why should I care? about him”.

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