My school!

I have studied in a civilian-military school since 2010. At the begining, I was really frightened and nervous because it was a different, new experience. I saw lot think I don't like; the pressure, the hard requirements, the "bad" guys. However, I also saw a lot of things that I did like: the sports (boxing, taekwondo, swimming, and others), the good authorities and the hierarchical structure. Right now I am in my fourth year of a bachelor's degree in science and letters with computer science introduction. I have ascended to the rank of private and I will be graduating in 2015.

Well written! Try to stop using 'etc.' in you writing. Good luck!