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so crazy mind i met a childhood friend yesterday ,we have lost touch with each other for 15 years .to be honest ,we liked each other when we were students in middle school ,both of us knew that ,but kept that as a secret.we experienced a very happy and free time .then after graduation from middle school ,i went to high school ,he decided to find a job ,we departed .from then on i got to know something about him from other friends ,they told me :he lived a difficult life in a strange city ,he fell in love with a girl ,he traveled from a city to another ,he married a girl i knew ,he had a baby ,,,,,.i always met him in my dreams ,and this sort of dream have lasted until i graduated from university .really to my surprise,he called me and told me that he was on business trip in my city ,wanted to see me .we still can recognize each other immediately ,he is thin ,a little tired ,i even found he had some grey hear .we had a diet together ,shared our experience ,he told me he married a wrong woman .and we also hold different opinions on different aspects on life .i am still single now ,28years old ,everybody around me urge me to get married as soon as possible .they told me do not be so picky ,do not take marriage too serious .i am that kind of person ,always have a lot thoughts on one thing .i feel i am just out control of my mind .in my space time i like memorize english article.the last essay i memorize was from TED talk ,the title is "take 10 minutes out of a day to learn how to be more mindful",at the first minute i read :we are lost in thoughts even more than 47%of our time ,that is crazy ,but we this all the time .and i was so agreeable to him .but i was lost in thoughts at the second minute .that is really ridiculous .i sent him out ,got back ,sit down and did not do nothing ,just got myself inundated with thoughts .i really want to pick the extra mind from my brain ,or to turn off the mind .

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英语的“我” 永远要大写“I”。标点符号要紧跟在句末后面,且后面要有一个空格!
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Such a crazy mind

I met a childhood friend yesterday. We had lost touch with each other for 15 years. To be honest, we liked each other when we were students in middle school. Both of us knew that, but we kept it that as a secret. We experienced a very happy and free time. Then, after graduation from middle school, I went to high school and he decided to find a job. We departed. From then on i got to know something I learned things about him from other friends. They told me he lived a difficult life in a strange city, he fell in love with a girl, he traveled from one city to another, he married a girl I knew, he had a baby... I always met him in my dreams, and these sorts of dreams have lasted until I graduated from university. Recently, to my surprise, he called me and told me that he was on a business trip in my city, and that he wanted to see me. We still can recognized each other immediately. He looked thin and a little tired. I even found he had some grey hair. We had a dinner together and shared our experiences. He told me he married the wrong woman. We also hold different opinions on many different aspects of life.

I am still single and  28 years old. Everybody around me is urging me to get married as soon as possible. They tell me to not be so picky, to not take marriage too seriously. I am that kind of person. I always have a lot of thoughts on something. I feel i am just out not in control of my mind. In my spare time I like to memorize English articles. The last essay I memorized was from a TED talk. The title was "take 10 minutes out of every day to learn how to be more mindful." At the first minute I read that we are lost in thoughts even more than 47% of our the time. That is crazy ,but we are this way all the time. .and I was so very agreeable to with him, but I was lost in my thoughts at by the second minute. That is really ridiculous. I said goodbye to him, out ,got came back home, sat down and did nothing, just let myself become inundated by my thoughts. I really want to pick that extra mind out of my brain, to turn off the mind.

 ,sit down and did not do nothing ,just got myself
inundated with thoughts .i really want to pick the extra mind from my brain ,or to turn off the mind .

 

No space before periods, commas, etc., in English. Space after them. I is always capitalized.

Very interesting essay, but it seemed like you shifted from on topic to another midway through. You tied it all up at the end well though. But the transition from dinner with childhood friend to meditation was a little abrupt.

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