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Today I talked to one of my old friends. She recently found a new job and told me her colleagues are very nice to her. I'm happy for her. We haven't seen each other for a long time because we both left our home town. Now she is back and settled down. She told me the changes in our city. I listened to her describing those streets and places once I familiar with, and imaging the new look they've become. The urge to go back home struck me. But I knew, deep inside my heart, what I miss is the memory not the place.
(Not sure how to end it .... suggestions are welcomed! ) :p
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Today I talked to one of my old friends. She recently found a new job and told me her colleagues are very nice to her. I'm happy for her. We haven't seen each other for a long time because we both left our home town a long time ago. Now she's gone back to our hometown and settled down. She told me about the changes in our city. I listened to her describing the streets and places I was once so familiar with, and I kept imaging all the changes. The urge to go back home struck.
I think the ending is fine. I really know what you mean. You're smart not to go back. Just keep your good memories and move on. Whenever I "go back" to a place it looks changed and smaller and I usually feel strangly betrayed or wronged somehow. But of course, no one ever promised me these places would last - but I can promise you > your memories wiil! Take care.
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