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Training for writing IELTS. Could someone correct my task, please? Hi, I am training myself to take IELTS exam. So I wrote the following essay for writing task. The track was: Even though globalization affects the world's economics in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss. You should write at least 250 words. My essay: Globalization is a big phenomenal been beginning over five decades  ago. There is no doubts, it has shown impressive improvement in a lot kinds, above all into economy. Unfortunately, such as many other things, also the globalization is composed by some negative aspects. Thanks to the opening of national boundaries, different types of the products can be sold and bought amongst diverse countries avoiding paying national taxes. Another positive things of the globalization concerns the immigration: if the national law allowed it, foreign citizens can reach their parents in other countries. In the financial field the investors can exploit some good agreement amongst more countries to do good investments in others parts of the world standing in front of own home personal computer. Despite the improvement described upon, We have to admit the negative aspects such as international crimes, financial crises and diplomatic crises. Opening of boundaries and trades means also exporting and importing of crimes and criminals. After the fall of Berlin's wall,  some types of crime committed by international organized crimes spreads throughout the Europe. For understanding the entity of phenomena it is need reflects on many poor women which are obliged to prostitute due to no piety criminals or for instance how much is spread drug amongst teenagers. In conclusion, we can define the globalization as a phenomena extremely important and good enough to obtain economic improvement, but at the same time we have to do monitor and pay attention because it could be drive us toward dangerous situations. What do you think?

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     Globalization is a big phenomenal been phenomenon that began beginning over five decades ago. There is no doubts that it globalization has shown impressive improvement in a lot kinds improved many things, above all, into the world economy and immigration. Economically speaking, investors can may now exploit some good advantagious financial agreements amongst more countries, investing capital to do good investments in others parts of the world standing in front of own from their home personal computer. Another positive things of the globalization concerns the immigration: if the national law allowed it, As for immigration, foreign citizens can may more easily reach their parents in other countries. In the financial field theUnfortunately, such as many other things, also the globalization is composed by some negative aspects. 
     As is the case with many things, globalization is responsible for negatively impacting other aspects of international trade. Thanks to the opening of national economic boundaries, different types of the products can be sold and bought amongst diverse countries while avoiding paying national taxes. Despite the improvement described upon, We have to admit the Another negative aspects impact such as is international crime, which may lead to further financial crises, and diplomatic crises issues. The opening of boundaries and trades easing of trade restrictions may intail means also exporting and importing the inport and export of crime and criminals. After the fall of the Berlin's Wall some types of many felonies were crimes committed by international organized crime syndicates spread throughout Europe. For understanding the entity of phenomena it is To understand the phemenon of globalization we need to consider it's effect upon many women living in poverty, whom were thrust into prostitution, the rise in petty criminals on our streets, and the rise in illegal drug use amongst teenagers. need reflects on many poor women which are obliged to prostitute due to no piety criminals or for instance how much is spread drug amongst teenagers. 
     In conclusion, we can define the globalization as an economically important phenomenon extremely important and good enough to obtain producing gains in economic improvement, but at the same time we have to do monitor and pay attention to it's other effects because it could be drive us toward dangerous situations. 

Pretty good, Antonio. Check the corrections and revisions to see if you recognize the errors. If not, please comment and I'll explain. ????

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