Mid-Autumn Festival

對不起, 忠言逆耳, 你的英文太中文化了. 好像從中文直接翻譯成英文. 至少你没有使用机械翻译. 最好你能給我一份你的中文版, 這样我可以幫助你怎样好好地的翻译或修改.如果我現在整理的話, 就怕改到天翻地覆了.樓上不敢吐真言,不過同意內容寫得有意義.

It was a Chinese traditional festival, Mid-autumn Festival, yesterday. I went into the mountains where my friend's family is located. Drinking some beer, tasting delicious moon cakes and some other dishes, we sat chatting around the table, with all of us and the whole mountains bathed in the bright moonlight. My hometown, a big city in the central China, is very far away from the moutainous city I 'm working in and nearly every weekend or freedays my friends will always invite me to their families. Spending a Mid-autumn Festival in a mountainous area and sitting in an spacious and quiet country yard, I was feeling pleased and elegant in my mind.Can we be feeling like this when sitting in a small chair squeezed among the skyscrapers? No matter where I'll go in the future, this is a most unforgettable experience in my life.

THIS IS AN EXCELLENT PIECE OF PROSE.

5 MINOR COMMENTS:

1  in the central China.   Central China.  The adjective 'central' goes before the noun and does not need 'the'  before it.  You can of course say the centre of China.

2  I was feeling pleased and elegant in my mind. Elegant is not really used to describe a mental state, it is used to describe something physical (an elegant lady, chair....etc) or even a clever and simple plan or solution (this is an elegant solution to our design problem). Perhaps you were content or satisfied, using the word 'elegant' would imply your looks or outward image, or that you had resolved a problem with your elegant solution.

3  freedays-  we tend to say holidays or free time.

4  working in? I'm not sure what you mean here.  Woring during the week? working hard? Sorry, I'm not sure.

5   a most unforgettable experience in my life.  The words in red do not make sense together, If it is the best IN YOUR LIFE then there can only be ONE experience so you should use 'THE' not 'a'.  If if was just one of the good experiences in your like you can say an unforgettable experience (as itwas good but there were others and it was not unique) 

I have picked on tiny errors, this really is a good prose, well done indeed.