MY FAMILY- Could you correct it,please?

Hello, I want to practise my writting in English and for that, I am going to talk about my family.
I have three siblings, two of them are males and the other is a female. My oldest sibling is called Christian and he is twenty-seven years old. Nowadays he is working as a plumber in Toledo.
My youngest brother is 5 years old. He is called Maximo, like the main character in the film Gladiator ruled by Russel Crown. In my neighborhood, whenever my little brother goes walking up to the bakery everyone acclaims him saying loudly: "MAXIMO! MAXIMO! MAXIMO!".

My sister's name is Sara and she is twelve years old. She has dark hair and a beautiful smile, which brightens her face when she smiles. She always looks very happy when she is listening music. She likes listening to all kinds of music.

In addition, I have two marvellous grandparents who I really love.

Thank you very much and I hope you have a few minutes to correct this. (Good luck with your study)

MY FAMILY- Could you correct it,please?

Hello, I want to practise my writting english and for that I am going to talk about my family.
I have three siblings, two boys and one girl. My oldest sibling is called Christian and he is twenty-seven years old, nowadays he is working as a plumber in Toledo.
My youngest brother is 5 years old, he is called Maximo, like the main character in the film Gladiator ruled by Russel Crown, In my neighborhood, when my little brother goes walking up to the bakery everyone acclaim him aloud saying MAXIMO! MAXIMO! MAXIMO!.

My sister is called Sara and she is twelve years old, she has hair dark and a beautyful smile drown on her face.She  enjoy (feels herself very happy when she´s) listening music.She likes listening all kinds of music all in all.

To conclude,I have two marvellous grandparents who I relly love.

Thank you very much and I hope you have a few minutes to correct this.