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Migrant Workers in Beijing Beijing, the capital city of China, is the centre of Chinese economy, education and military force. It attracts thousands of workers from towns and cities around Beijing and even all over the country, who are usually referred to as "migrant workers". The reasons for their existence can be divided into two main aspects. For one thing, the slow economic development and the lack of social insurance of the countryside lead to the less position offers and poverty there. For another thing, the large market of Beijing provides the workers with more working opportunities, higher salaries and better benefits, which attracts thousands of migrant workers to seek fortunes in Beijing. However, too much migrant workers cause the increase of unemployment rate and problems of houses, transportation and so on. Some measures should be taken. The government should pay much attention to the development of the countryside by developing the local industries and improving the social insurance. Besides, relevant policies should be made to maintain the price of houses and apartments.

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Migrant Workers in Beijing

Beijing, the capital city of China, is the centre  center of Chinese economy, education and military force. It attracts thousands of workers from towns and cities around Beijing and even from all over the country, who are usually referred to as "migrant workers".
The reasons for their existence can be divided into two main aspects. For one thing   First, the slow economic development and the lack of social insurance of in the countryside has lead to the less  job positions offers and an increase in poverty there. For another thing Second, the large market of in Beijing provides the workers with more working opportunities offers workers more oppurtunities to work, higher salaries and better benefits, which attracts thousands of migrant workers to seek their fortunes in Beijing. However, too much many migrant workers causes the an increase of in unemployment rates and problems of houseing problems, transportation and so on. Some measures should be taken. The government should pay much attention to the development of the countryside's by developing the local industries and improving their social insurance. Besides, relevant policies should be made to maintain the price of houses and apartments.

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Oops I mispelled opportunities, but I am sure you get the gist. Anyways I hope this helped :)
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