IELTS. Writing tast 2. Essay #2

Task:

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay:

Who should teach children to be good members of society? There are two points of view: some think that this task should be laid on the parents’ shoulders (or 'borne by parents') , while others think that school is a better place to learn this. In this essay I will take a close look on at (examine) both opinions.

So what is the advantage of being taught by parents? Firstly, they have an experience how to behave properly in society. Secondly, thinking of what is best for their child, they can give the best advices how on how to be a good member of society. But there is also another side. Parents' experience couldn’t always fit to the child’s situation (The meaning is a bit vague and it's a funny way of saying what you're trying to say. Perhaps 'Parents can't always understand what it's like to be a child today'). Time passes (Perhaps: 'Things change over time') and what would have been be a good advice fifteen years ago now might now be just useless.

Then wWhat about other opinion (side of the argument)? Could school be a better teacher than a child's parents? There is a saying: “The best way to teach someone to swim is to throw him in deep water”. But in my opinion letting a school to teach your child how to be a good member of society is like throwing him in a river which is too that is flowing too fast. In this case he has might have a chance to become the best “swimmer” and but he also has a bigger chance to drown (or 'runs a bigger risk of drowning').

The bottom line is neither of those two opinions perspectives is perfect absolutely correct. But to give your child wisely chosen advice from your experience and also let him get his own experience in from school, to discuss and help him understand his problems, and he, without any doubts, will become a good member of society.

256 words, 35 minutes.
August, 8th.