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Across the universe (the film) I'm watching the movie "Across the universe", a musical with Beatles' songs. have you ever watched it? I'm describing a scene taken from this movie and I would like to know if it is good written. In this scene Lucy is giving a good-bye kiss to her boyfriend Danny, while the song “all my loving” from The Beatles is playing. He is sitting in a car in front of his house and she is standing out of the window holding his hand tightly. Their hands separated when he nodded his head to the driver and the car left. Lucy runs after it with a sadly expression. Danny’s mother, who is standing out of the house with his sisters, blows her son a kiss saying “Goodbye sweetheart” and his sisters run also after the car saying goodbye to their brother with their hands. The scene changes and the time seems to have passed: Lucy is now lying on her bed, moving her foot at the rhythm of the music while is writing a letter to Danny. One more time the scene changes and we are brought away from her teenager room: two trucks are proceeding on the road and a tractor on the background is digging the fields. Danny, who has probably arrived to Vietnam, is sitting inside one of the trucks with other soldiers, reading with great excitement the letter Lucy has written to him. He folds the letter carefully putting it closer to his chin, and then he closes his eyes thinking about Lucy. Then we can see another military truck going past a sports ground with soldiers on the top of it who are whistling some cheerleaders who say “bye” in response to them. On the ground there are some rugby players training.

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Across the universe (the film)

I'm watching the movie "Across the universe", a musical with Beatles' songs. have you ever watched it?
I'm describing a scene taken from this movie. Is it good written?


In this scene Lucy is giving a good-bye kiss to her boyfriend Danny, while the song “all my loving” from The Beatles is playing. He is sitting in a car in front of his house and she is standing out of the window holding his hand tightly. Their hands separated when he nodded his head to the driver and the car left. Lucy runs after it with a sadly expression. Danny’s mother, who is standing out of the house with his sisters, blows her son a kiss saying “Goodbye sweetheart” and his sisters run also after the car saying goodbye to their brother with their hands.
The scene changes and the time seems to have passed: Lucy is now lying on her bed, moving her foot at the rhythm of the music while is writing a letter to Danny. One more time the scene changes and we are brought away from her teenager room: two trucks are proceeding on the road and a tractor on the background is digging the fields. Danny, who has probably arrived to Vietnam, is sitting inside one of the trucks with other soldiers, reading with great excitement the letter Lucy has written to him. He folds the letter carefully putting it closer to his chin, and then he closes his eyes thinking about Lucy. Then we can see another military truck going past a sports ground with soldiers on the top of it who are whistling some cheerleaders who say “bye” in response to them. On the ground there are some rugby players training.

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