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The secret of life -03-
The secret of life
People watch dramas and movies because they are funny and interesting.
One theme that is consistently going on through the story is how fun they are to me. (comment: Could you specify what are you trying to say here? How fun somethings are to you can't be a theme of a drama, can it? I am sure you meant to say something else). Of course, when Dramas bring together a variety of episodes, spectator see many episodes as a story having a coherent system evoking dramtic suspense, which provides excitement and (teaches some life) lessons.
Likewise, we get up (come up) with good (positive) expectations (comment: expectations regarding what? if you clarify it here it will help to understand the rest of the paragraph because so far it is hanging in the air as something very abstract). That’s because we have a systematic frame (comment: what do you mean by " systematic frame"? It is not wrong, but I would advise to use a more standard expression to help readers understand your idea) penetrating a (our) whole life. There is something by which we can tie many daily scenes into one. We can’t sense or realize it because it in itself operates unconsciously (on unconsious level. comment: "It" can't be doing something unconciously because "it" is not human being to have a conciousness, but "it" can be part of OUR unconcious thinking).
What is it?
That is a so called kind of game (this is a some sort of game). (comment: "so called" asks for a specific word to follow it. So, don't break its strength by placing vague "kind of" after that.). The most important knowledge (that is) not learned about in the whole life is the essential game (is the essential part of the game). Nobody tells us there is (comment: you have two options : say where something is /or another option where you have to use quotation marks nobody tells us: "there is the XXX!" ) the essential game we have to play. So we played the wrong game and experienced the unnecessary failure, openly blaming others for our misfortunes.
The story child (children or a child)like the most is (usually) about the battle between police and criminals. It can make boring children change (it can transform a bored child into the one... ) ones with wide and twinkling eyes. Well, what is it? That is the separation between he and I ; they and we (between "me" and "him", "us" and "them"). The most important thing in the game of life is who is (on) our side and who is on the other side. This kind of separation is an innate nature in humans (an innate part of human nature).
Asa foal given birth (from the moment a child is born) (it/ he /she) naturally turns to his mom, when in danger, (because) who is our side is written in brain from the birth as human, (because who is on his/her side is recorded in his/her brain) in that we are social being . Tom Hanks in the movie “Cast Away” isloated in the desert island (restructure the sentence: in the movie “Cast Away”, Tom Hanks , isolated on a deserted island...) came to talk with the volleyball named Wilson, protecting him against (from) unexpected circumstances, keeping our (the ball at his side) side against many risks to come (in spite of many following risks) . Unconscious Enemy exists. (comment: this last sentense seems to be hanging in the air since it is too short to understand whether it has a connection to the previous sentence. You have 2 options: cut it out entirey or develop it in a bigger sentence).
People often used to say “Family is precious, so are friends. We need love and money. We have to make it.” But those are no more than a series of steps to (towards) taking (using) a useful resources in order to succeed in life. They are just a lot of stations leading to the real destination.
First not discerning my side from another side, you will get depressed mistaking our (my?)side for an enemy and your life will get futile mistaking enemy for our side. (again I am confused who is "my" who is "you" and who is "our", sorry. If you start with "you" and "I", don't switch to "ours" or any other.) Life has no meaning since then (comment: gramatically, the sentence is alright, but try to use "since" in the begining of the sentence, not at the end. Also, using "since then" means that you refer to something that happened in the past. But I assume that roght now you talk about a process and not about specific events that happened in the past. So, I advise After that life will have no meaning). The knowledge in the (accumulated in the ) humanities (human sciences, or rather social sciences) like philosophy, socialogy, politics, history, and art is essentially the knowledge of choosing (separating) our side from everybody or everything. It is who stands by my side that matters the most. (coment: again, try not tu use "ours" and "my" tgether talking about one idea).
Hope this helps! Again, most sentences are gramatically totally correct , so my comments are there just to make your entry sound more natural.
The secret of life -03-
The secret of life
People watch dramas and movies because they are funny and interesting.
One theme that is consistently going on through the story is how fun they are to me. Of course, when Dramas bring together a variety of episodes, spectator see many episodes as a story having a coherent system evoking dramtic suspense, which provides excitement and lessons.
Likewise, we get up with good expectations. That’s because we have a systematic frame penetrating a whole life. There is something by which we can tie many daily scenes into one. We can’t sense or realize it because it in itself operates unconsciously.
What is it?
That is a so called kind of game. The most important knowledge not learned about in the whole life is the essential game. Nobody tells us there is the essential game we have to play. So we played the wrong game and experienced the unnecessary failure, openly blaming others for our misfortunes.
The story child like the most is about the battle between police and criminals. It can make boring children change ones with wide and twinkling eyes. Well, what is it? That is the separation between he and I ; they and we. The most important thing in the game of life is who is our side and who is on the other side. This kind of separation is an innate nature in humans.
As a foal given birth naturally turns to his mom, when in danger, who is our side is written in brain from the birth as a human, in that we are social beings. Tom hanks in the movie “Cast Away” isloated in the desert island came to talk with the volleyball named Wilson, protecting him against unexpected circumstances, keeping our side against many risks to come. Unconscious Enemy exists.
People often used to say “Family is precious, so are friends. We need love and money. We have to make it.” But those are no more than a series of steps to taking a useful resources in order to succeed in life. They are just a lot of stations leading to the real destination.
First not discerning my side from another side, you will get depressed mistaking our side for the enemy and your life will get(become) futile mistaking the enemy for our side. Life has no meaning since then. The knowledge in the humanities like philosophy, socialogy, politics, history, and art is essentially the knowledge of choosing our side from everybody or everything. It is who stands by my side that matters the most.
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