The Shadow (Part 2)
About two hours later I woke up to a stream of air. Everything was quiet, but was a strange calm. I stepped into the corridor and I felt myself frozen. The front door was wide open. Suddenly I began to feel my temple beating sharply. I wanted to close the door but I was paralyzed. All my senses had sharpened and were alert.
Something fell to the floor inside. I quickly look in that direction but I saw nothing. Looking more carefully I noticed a dark shape that came closer slowly but surely…
At that moment I wake up.
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The Shadow (Part 2)
About two hours later I woke up to a stream of gust of cold air. Everything was quiet, but there was a strange calm. I stepped into the corridor and I felt myself frozen freeze. The front door was wide open. Suddenly I began to feel my temple beating sharply. My head started to pound. I wanted to close the door but I was paralyzed. All my senses had sharpened and were alert.
Something fell to the floor inside. I quickly looked in that direction but I saw nothing. Looking more carefully I noticed a dark shape that came coming closer, slowly but surely…
At that moment I woke up.
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The Shadow (Part 2)
About two hours later I woke up to a stream of air. Everything was quiet, but there was a strange calm. I stepped into the corridor and I felt myself freeze. The front door was wide open. Suddenly I began to feel my pulse in my temple. I wanted to close the door but I was paralyzed. All my senses had sharpened and were alert.
Something fell to the floor inside. I quickly looked in that direction but I saw nothing. Looking more carefully I noticed a dark shape that came closer slowly but surely…
At that moment I woke up.
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The Shadow (Part 2)
About two hours later I woke up to a stream of air. Everything was quiet, but there was a strange calm (awkward wording). I stepped into the corridor and I felt myself frozen freezing (you could also say, "I felt frozen"). The front door was wide open. Suddenly I began to feel my temple beating sharply. I wanted to close the door but I was paralyzed. All my senses had sharpened and were alert (preferred: were sharp and alert, parallelism).
Something fell onto the floor inside. I quickly looked in that direction but I saw nothing. Looking more carefully I noticed a dark shape that came was coming (progressive, it was in progress when you noticed it) closer slowly but surely…
At that moment I wake woke up.
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Thanks, Arwa. That was my intention :)
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Wow! Very good work. You manage to build a lot of tension in only a few sentences. I only made a couple of tiny corrections. Otherwise it was solid.
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