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First notebook entry: Introducing myself I'm a chinese girl .My name is kary . Because I want to make many friends with a lot of people , so learn English . I’m a cheerful girl who loves laughing . My greatest avocation is musIng. I can stay by myself for a long time without feelIng disconsolate In the least .

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm a chinese girl.  My name is kary.  Because I want to make many friends with a lot of people, so I learn English .


I’m a cheerful girl who loves laughing.  My greatest avocation is musIng (I think "meditation" would be better here)

 I can stay by myself  alone for a long time without feeling disconsolate in the least .

 

1. As for punctuation marks, there must be one space after a comma and two spaces after a period.

2. "because" and "so", "although/though" and "but" (these conjuctions)cannot be used simultaneously in one sentence, which is totally different from expression in Chinese.

3. Thanks and I have learned a new word "disconsolate" in your writing:))

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