A Formal Letter

Since your title suggests formality, I shall correct it in the most formal business type of letter.  

Dear Sir or Madame Sir/Madam

As per your I found your advertisement in the local newspaper, [provide the exact name of the newspaper.  Always good to be precise to avoid confusion if there are more than one paper.] and would like to buy I have an interest in purchasing a detached house in the suburbs of London. Can you please furnish me with further details on it. I would like to know more details about that.

At first of all I would like to know ask about area. Are there any Will there be shops nearby? And what is with How about public transport? How far is the nearest stop? I also would like to know more details about home furnishings. I am especially interested in those furnished with a shower and a washing machine. It is necessity for me. I would be very grateful if you could tell me if It would be great if there  there are any sport facilities like a gyms or water and swimming pools? At the end I would like to ask about cultural entertainments is this area. Are there any concerts, cinema and events Having easy access to cultural and entertainment centers will be most wonderful.

Thank you.  I look forward to your reply. answer

Your faithfully Sincerely, [Don't use faithfully.  You are not providing a service to the person you are writing.  This also archaic style.  You are putting yourself as a servant.  This is still used in legal correspondence written by a lawyer to his client. ]

Andrzej Nowakowski




I think it sound's kinda sounds unnatural. Can you please correct/polish it? Could you tell me how to improve that?