First notebook entry: Introducing myself

您好！

我刚开始学习中国在我们的国家University.Learn，因为可能需要在China.This工作是关系到我的工作。

Hi, I don't want to pretend to be a Chinese expert at all  here but one thing to remember in Chinese grammar is that Chinese often has this pattern:

Subj    Location   Verb

我       在家       吃反
我       在大学    学汉语

 我      在中国     骑自行车

So, in your first sentence

我刚开始学习中国在我们的国家

maybe you could change to 
 我    在(your country)   刚开始学习中文了。 （I am not sure about the 了 here. 了  sometimes means a change of state or  conditions. )

Assignment:  Can you now  modify your other sentence by yourself?

因为可能需要在China.

Now let's wait for the real Chinese exports to correct both of us! :)
 

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

您好！

我刚开始在我们州立大学学习中文，因为可能需要去中国工作。学习中文关系到我的工作。

您好！

我刚开始学习中国在我们的国家University.Learn，因为可能需要在China.This工作是关系到我的工作。

Hello,it's a little hard to guess what you are trying to say as it looks like translated by Google. I think it'll be better if you could write the text in English at the end for others to understand easily.

I would say it like this:

您好！

我刚开始在我们州立大学学习中文，因为可能需要去中国工作。学习中文关系到我的工作。

(Hello! I've just started learning Chinese in our state university,because I may need to go to China to work.Learning Chinese is related to my job. )

1.the place should be put before the verb.

2.state university is 州立大学,state can be translated as 州(like in Plovdiv state) or 国家(country；state；nation),here I think you mean the former.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

您好！

 

在我们国家的大学(university)，我刚刚才开始学习(learn)中文，因为可能需要在中国(china)工作，这个工作关系到我的工作(这个工作关系到我的未来)

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Chinese grammar and most of all talk about the place, and then after doing.

这个工作关系到我的工作:This Sentence has a language problem.I guess you want to say that this work is related to my future.You can say"这个工作关系到我的未来"

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

您好！

我刚开始学习，中国在我们的国家University.Learn（What's your meaning），因为可能需要在中国工作，这是关系到我的工作的。