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What changes do you think the new century will bring? The history proved that the society is always developing time by time, and both the scientific and the material improved. In the past century, people try hard at many aspects, and in the new century, as far as I am concerned, there are at least three aspects will change: the traffic will become more convenience, the education will more concern on art and humanity, and the economics will get rid of depression. Firstly, in the 21 century, the traffic will become more convenience and people will travel more efficiency. These conveniences derived from two factors. One is that the vehicle will be more developed, such as the private cars will available to all the families instead of the bicycles, and this changes short people’s time which they had wasted on the road before. The other is that the traffic system will become more efficient, for the reason that more viaducts will be build to release the traffic jam. Secondly, education will more concern on art and humanity in the new century. In the past, the science and technology paid more attention by our state. The science subjects are treated more important as they are considered link to the society’s development more directly. But as our society developing, people began to realize that the art and humanity values the equal importance. Last but not the least, in the new century, we can believe optimistic that the economics will get rid of depression. The economics will growth and it will also improve people’s life. It is reasonable to say so because of the development of the productivity in the 21 century. In summary, there are mainly three changes respectively on the traffic, the education, and the economics will change, and these changes will surely improve people’s lives and people will enjoy themselves more convenient, more efficient, and more happiness lives in the 21 century.

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What changes do you think the new century will bring?

The History has proved that the society is always developing time by over time, and both the scientific science and the materials have improved. In the (better: Over the) past century, people have try tried hard at to fix many aspects issues and, in the new century, as far as I am concerned, there are will be at least three aspects that will change: the traffic will become more convenience convenient, the education will focus more concern on art and humanity, and the economics will get rid of depression. (Better: As far as I'm concerened, in the new century there will be at least three aspects... )

Firstly, (Better: First of all,) in the 21st century, the traffic will become be more convenience convenient and people will travel more efficiency efficiently. These conveniences are derived from two factors. One is that the vehicle will be more developed, such as the private cars will be available to all the families instead of the bicycles, and this changes short people’s time which they had wasted on the road before. (One is that cars will be more advanced, so that private cars will be available to all families instead of bicycles.) The other is that the traffic system will become more efficient, for the reason that because more viaducts(better: roads) will be built to release relieve the traffic jams.

Secondly, education will be more concerned with on art and humanity in the new century. In the past, the science and technology was paid more attention by our state. (Better: In the past, our state / government paid more attention to science and technology.)  The Science subjects are is treated as more important as because they are it is considered to link to the society’s development more directly. (Better: Science is treated as more important because it is considered to directly link to society's development.) But as our society was developing, people began to realize that the art and humanity values the are of equal importance values.

Last but not the least, in the new century, we can believe optimistically that the economics will get rid of depression. The economics will growth and it will also improve people’s life lives. It is reasonable to say so assume because of the development of the productivity in the 21st century.

In summary, there are mainly three changes respectively on the in traffic, the education, and the economics respectively will change, and these changes will surely improve people’s lives and people will enjoy themselves more conveniently, more efficiently, and more happiness lives happily in the 21 century.
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To Dawei64:hehe~my english is just so so!
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wow, great piece your English is very good...well done...I can only see a few very simple changes to make...well done...
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I missed a sentence: and this changes short people’s time which they had wasted on the road before. and these changes decrease the amount of time people wasted on the road before.

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